Coffee or You?

"You know how I hate this kind of coffee, but I’m drinking it because I miss you."

I'm here again, 

In this old cafe,

Sitting near the window pane,

Where we spent time everyday;

 

I ordered the same black coffee,

You used to order back then;

Those times I thought I was happy,

Now, I can't even remember when;

 

Took a sip to taste it,

But burned my tongue;

Should've think before tasting it,

Maybe I won't get stung;

 

As I take few more sips,

My tongue adapts to the pain;

As the pain skips,

Relaxation begins to gain;

 

Well that’s worth the risk,

Even though it hurt me;

I didn’t regret moving in whisk,

To gain enjoyment of this coffee;

In this black coffee,

There's this strong bitterness;

Bitterness that I never foresee,

Which blocks the coffee's goodness;

 

But as I drink more,

There's some hidden sweetness,

Where the bitterness could be ignore,

Blending coffee's completeness;

 

That sweetness makes you continue,

Craving for more;

If I only knew,

How it'd made my heart sore;

 

I don’t know what’s wrong with me?

Is it really the coffee or you?

You know how I hate this kind of coffee,

But still drinking it when I miss you;

We moved so haste,

That our love's filled with bitterness;

But the memories never a waste,

Because there's hidden sweetness.

 

As I continue enjoying this cup,

Coffee stained upon my shirt;

I tried hard to clean it up,

Is it possible to revert?

 

Coffee or you,

Maybe it meant to leave a stain;

To reminisce those days I had with you,

Because like this coffee you’re worth the pain.

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

This poem is just, ugh, so amazing and so good. It was absolutely gorgeous and I loved the imagery and I just loved it all!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Because like this coffee you are worth the pain. so gorgeous love this last line thankyou for submitting thispoem to my competition, loved it, well done.

[Kim Jimenez]

Thank you

[fadingtale]

That ending gives a perfect emotional reaction. Beautiful how you wrote this piece! Thank you for submitting for all about love contest!

[Kim Jimenez]

Thank you for appreciating this poem :)

[Black Jess]

Gosh !!! That was brilliant *-* your words brought tears to my eyes ... I felt your pain between the lines . It's amazing how a simple cup of coffee can reminds you of a lot of painful memories . And it's amazing how you changed this simple habit that we all do into something hard to do !!! Really Great Job =)

[Kim Jimenez]

Thank You very much! :)

[Damien Ridge]

Was a really good poem, the story was easy to relate to for me. But I love how you represented getting used to pain and almost enjoying it to and extent/getting comfortable with it. Thanks for sharing it, good story.

[Kim Jimenez]

Thank you :)

[Rebecca Leigh]

I like the message you convey but i would seriously consider revising this; the grammar is very inconsistent... especially with past and present tenses... and lose "thee" at the end... its archaic... unless you want to turn it into all old English it looks like a word sore...

[Kim Jimenez]

Thank you for your review. Will try to edit this poem. Thanks for the insights.