United WE Stand

A little patriotic poem.

United we stand

Bloody we fall

Victorious we die,

with Peace after all.

Unfurl our flag in the sky!

May forever it wave!

(to remind us the price

that we dearly paid)

But now in our haste

we dare suggest

to dismantle the system

that we once knew best.

Though His Word we ignore,

the LORD US remember!

Oh! that we would look back!

(now in our december)

What Our Nation once was!

For the Righteous, we DID stand

UNITED

(as one)

Author's Note

I don't write much poetry(that should tell you how bad a bus ride it was), so please, comment away! (And yes, the flag is a little out of date)

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

Amazing piece, I mean wow. Such flow and elegance. If this were chocolate it would be rich and decadent, with a bitter truth you here so well represent. Again WOW!
Well you should write a lot more and tell everyone it was me... j/k.
Absolutely love this.
Chris

[Bráthair Faolchu]

Thank you very much, Chris! I spent about a week trying to perfect this and am glad this could compete in the chocolate world!

[unsavable_soul]

I hope that wasn't offensive, used it as a term of endearment purely. I love chocolate, and so it was the first thing to mind. I sent this to my brother in the Army you accredited of course and he loved it, described it as something our forefathers would say about these times.
Beautiful Work.
Chris.

[Bráthair Faolchu]

Oh, no offence taken, I too, am a HUGE fan of chocolate. I might have to write a piece about it some day...

[Emily B]

i think the flag is just fine, we have to remember where we came from so that we can see clearly where we are to go

[Bráthair Faolchu]

EXACTLY! The past is the key to our future success!

[Just Kim]

Hey this is prety darn awesome,
I totally love this write, & the way it is formatted.

[Bráthair Faolchu]

Thank you much indeed!

[Melody]

Wow, you've got a poet's touch..The flow, rhythm, and the words chosen are impeccable. The format and shape add extra character, good job!

[Bráthair Faolchu]

Thanks, Mel! I think the next poem is deffinately not going to be as good:(

[Melody]

Don't say that! I'm sure it will!

[Terohime]

Hello there, i read this and just let me say this poem was great. I enjoy reading poems like this. I the flow was great. i am looking foreword to reading more from you.
~Your friend Res

[Bráthair Faolchu]

Thank you, Res! I don't write often, but I am working on ideas for my next piece and will definitely be considering this sort of topic.