thoughts of heartless

my thoughts....

With darkness in our hearts we blindly judge,

With fear and hatred we accomplish nothing.

We fight a battle to end killing,

Yet that’s what we do.

What’s the point of fighting and killing,

Just to kill innocent people.

We accomplish nothing when we kill.

We fight for land and shiny things.

What happened to fighting for freedom?

What happened to peace?

What happened to what we stood for so long ago?

Now we stereotype without remorse, with out regret.

What happened to the old?

If this is what change brings then I don’t like it.

I don’t want it.

We need to stand up and stop it.

We need to do a lot.

But how many will do anything at all.

How many will continue on with what they do?

I don’t know but one thing is for sure.

If we don’t stop we will so be wiped.

Not because of a disaster,

But because of our self’s.

And we have no one to blame but our self’s.

Reviews

[E. Leo Wells]

Rhythm, depth of verse is what I don't see/hear. e.g. With darkness in our heart blindly we judge, ( it sounds better and holds the thought of two related thoughts, darkness in our heart, we blindly judge. (a small point) Powerful meaning and it sets the theme of the following verses, it holds the framework of the depth of the rest of what you have to say. The second verse is a repeat of the first verse, or a definition of "Darkness". Poetry leads the reader, to judge, to find meaning, or makes a point, or position from the verses. I sense this is a time when you have found the oxymoron's associate with war and have captured your emotions regarding the subject. Free Verse allows the poet to throw stones and fling arrows at those who would march into battle for the sake of battle. I don't dislike it, but would suggest you strengthen your words to bring more power and meaning to your message. Remember the pen and sword all aim at the heart, not come from the heart.

[NeonWolves]

I love this so much. Its harsh but its the blunt truth.
Im excited to see what other things you wrote.

[Kiari Sabon]

its good and has truth in it keep it up