fragility

I am broken how will, you,

put me together again?

I am sharp glass

that will cut you, if not careful,

but be wary I am fragile,

and you could break me further.

Be firm in holding me, so

my pieces stay together

as a new bond is formed

by the glue made from

your own tears as,

you try to figure out 

how...

I became so shattered.

How...

I became so broken.

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Like walking on egg shells. Nice work, we are all fragile in matters of the heart.

[kianatahleigh]

thank you for the comment and thanks for reading.

[emipoemi]

Wow! This one is amazing. This may be a personal note (and I personally advocate that critiques on a personal level are the number 1 no-no, because they tend to be vibe and style killers), but I'll say it just so you have something to think about. I don't condone the sharing and splitting of thoughts in the same line. The very first line, Line 7 and 11 do this, and poetry actually runs smoother if all the individual thoughts are together. So consider this edit:

"I am broken!
How will you put me together again?"

"Be firm in holding me,
so my pieces stay together"

"your own tears,
as you try to figure out"

Everything else is simply amazing! I love those last four lines! Put a semicolon after "shattered" for better flow, as also those lines are technically flowing into each other, so putting a period there breaks that flow. But absolutely fantastic! Well freaking done!

[kianatahleigh]

thank you for the feedback and advice as well as reading; I really appreciate it.

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Neville]

you pose an interesting conundrum within these fine words...........Neville

[kianatahleigh]

thank you and thank you for reading.

[Neville]

My pleasure.....

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Heartbreak is so common nowadays but how u capture it so exquisitely creative, love the glass shatter metaphor u employed. Your talent ought to cheer you on and prayer helps find those that can mend and repair us. Take care.

[kianatahleigh]

thank you for your comment and thank you for reading.

[Onlyme]

Deep poem that make you look below the surface and actually want to find out why they broken.

[kianatahleigh]

thank you and thank you for reading.

[Olivia Danielle]

This is a beautiful and sad poem. I love the comparison to glass, where it can be sharp, yet fragile. Very well written!

[kianatahleigh]

I am glad you liked the comparison, thank you for reading.