eyes

Eyes are a window.

What in people do they show?

They show transcendence.

Reviews

[red93]

Hi - I like the idea of this piece a lot - can I suggest slight amendments if you are writing this as a regular 5-7-5 haiku ? (Btw, the Japanese themselves no longer insist on 5-7-5 syllables for haiku, and free form haiku in English are increasingly popular, as they are closer to the original Japanese ethics and language).


Eyes are a window

Through which we view everything

Intended or not.



Obviously don't feel you have to take my suggestion on board by any means, but I've given it to you to show you another approach, which you may find useful. Well done and welcome to The World of Haiku :-)

[kianatahleigh]

thank you for your suggestions and thanks for reading.

[Neville]

yes indeed, quite beautiful, unless hidden behind their own mascara.... eye say, what a nice little haiku, we got ear..... Neville

[kianatahleigh]

Lucky for me I don't wear mascara. thank you and thank you for reading. Haikus are one of my favorite forms of poetry.

[Neville]

my pleasure, and yes, they can be very special..

[Olivia Danielle]

Eyes can be very deceiving, I enjoyed reading this poem immensely.

[kianatahleigh]

yeah eyes can be deceiving, but I like to think that no matter how much we try to hide even using eyes; a small part of the deception is still given away through the eyes.thank you, thank you for reading.

[Coyote Poetry]

Eyes can show many things. The eyes can hide things also. I enjoyed your poem and thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[kianatahleigh]

exactly, thank you for your comment and reading

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[wordman]

the eyes lead to the soul,and then the heart

[kianatahleigh]

yeah, thank you for reading

[wordman]

you`re welcome