"Green Grass"

on the spot; *NEW STYLE*; inspired by a writer on writerscafe

"Green Grass"

trying hard

to fight the darkness

the ever binding light

growing inside

the tunnel of echoes

you keep throwing yourself into

each and every time

only to hear the same voices again

telling you the same things

when the wind blows

and the tides come in

whispering greetings of farewell, whispering

the words

spoken

by your personal whirlwind

your chaos

your problems

on your shoulders, yet the world

has so many secrets to share

if you only listened

but you never really cared. Leaving but only a curd, the demonic

world you know, you left behind so many secrets.

so many rinds 

broken inside

not knowing of the world

you're living in now

soon enough, it'll all come back to you

what you forgot

what you remember

soon enough, even the darkness will go away. There'll be nothing

but green grass

that'll await your presence

Reviews

[Emily]

Nice poem!
Well done
Keep it up!

[Relic]

This suffers slightly (for me) from tense and punctuation problems but I think I know where you're going. Lots of people settle into their pity parties and never move on. That's a shame too. If only they could see the good that's out there and the good within themselves.

[Celie Rose]

Good job. I liked reading your poem. A bit haunting but beautiful. Keep writing

[Fatema]

this was a beautiful piece.
the words that you had used went inside of my heart

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautiful, touching piece!
Felt the touch of fresh air and the green grass!
Vivid and profound!