LoveSick

on the spot

love.

the only thing i ask of you

is to steal my heart

crush it in your tender hands

and wipe the 

bits away

don't pity me

just wipe the soot of your past

with the jagged edges of my love

today

will be a new

day 

for us all

hopefully when we realize

that it's not too late

when our hearts

are joint together

in solitary

confinement

love.

our time together

has been unique

the adventures

though

mightn't have been mischievous

i respect that

with all of time

and his temptations

come anxiety

and impulsiveness

and peevishness

we might have been acting on 

impulse

but lately

i'm not even sure

if love

even has a chance

if all of what we 

are seeing

is the crowded

screen of the truth that

we all expect

to be true

but this facade

is only a facade

nothing lives

here

but the lies we perceive to be true

Reviews

[Jen Walters]

I love the structure of this poem, as you read down you can tell there is more, so you keep reading to find out what there is. Love can make us sick in so many ways, and we have to judge our reactions carefully lest we hurt each other with our love. This is a beautiful love poem filled with so many ideas and thoughts. Thanks for sharing such a beautifully written poem and have a great day.

[Valentine]

If you wipe the soot away, Shouldn't all be forgiven? Valentine

[FaeryQueen]

no, i meant burden me with your past

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Dear poet, your poems have a life of their own..
Such depth and graveness in each line..
"but this facade is only a facade nothing lives here but the lies we perceive to be true"
Enjoyed it.. :)

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

This is an enchanting and poignant write....thank you for sharing!

[FaeryQueen]

thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
crafty and creative.............love your presentation.......
love is a whole box of crazy........
beautifully written........
i loved it!!!!
:)

[Amy R]

i love this,
very creative!
thank u for sharing :)

[Writer99]

I loved the last stanza great job