Raw with desire.

A fictional erotica.

In the flickering candle light,
I see your silhouette burning bright;
You press your body against mine,
Grab my hair and whisper, ‘I am thine’.

While the flames with passion burn,
You drag me close, we toss and turn.
You kiss my lips; make me struggle for air,
This wasn’t our dream, it’s a nightmare.

You pull, I push,
You pull again.
I close my eyes,
You call my name.
Consumed with desire,
Or driven by hate.
Is it still you?
Am I too late?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love how you portray the push-and-pull of love and hate in an erotic setting. This doesn't feel as deep as what I would call "erotica" -- it's mostly about what's going on in the mind. To me, erotica is more raw & blunt about the physical aspects of mating. To me, the mind is the most powerful sex organ of all & that's why a poem, mostly about the mental push-and-pull of surrender, is more impactful than erotica, in my book! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Fairy Khan]

I think you're right. I now see it differently. Thank you for your valuable insights.

[Jibey]

Pleasure and pain, lust and love, body heat and cold heart... a mixture all to familiar in the tangle of desire and doubt, of complex needs... I liked that paradoxes and contradictions in this erotic vision...

[Fairy Khan]

Thank you so much. I appreciate your review.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I suppose much is lost in the heat of the moment, and one is left with burning questions which leave their mark...
I like the tone in this one, kinda threatening. Interesting piece of writing.

[Fairy Khan]

Thanks Dr. Kay.

[Chris]

You put a woman's Heat into this one... AND the duality some actions emulate. Submission, dominance, love, lust - rape, release...

[Tinabells]

Wow.. this is different. First time to read such poem like this.. well done fairy 😊

[Fairy Khan]

Thank you, Tina. :)

[Chris Shaw]

I sense that this isn't quite so loving as it first appears. Your third stanza tells me this. I can see a conflict of emotions here. Well written Fairy.

Chris

[Fairy Khan]

That is exactly what I wanted the readers to feel. Thank you for your review, Chris. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Such a powerful piece written here in flowing verse. I doubt it needs an adult rating but better safe than sorry. An emotive but troubling tryst is in the protagonist's mind.

[Fairy Khan]

Thank you. :)

[Digvijay Singh]

There are very few poems i want few more lines from. This is one of those poems. Nicely written

[Fairy Khan]

Thanks for visiting and reading. :)

[LitStar]

an intimate jaunt of poetic revelry

sexy


-L.S

[Fairy Khan]

Thanks. :)