Lonely Lost Son

speechless

The first image I see every morning.
Is your innocent smiling face
Seeing you are growing
Day after day
So all I can do
Is that I kiss you
And ask you
Son, how are you today?
But..
You make me feel like i want to die
because, however had I to try,
You  have never given a reply
Come on, tell me
Why are you doing that to me?
You have chosen to have peace
Away from the hateful earth
But you never told me,
What shall I do?
Your toys, your room, your clothes
All around me
To remind me of you
Although I never forget you
Why were I promised of you
Since I can never enjoy being with you?
Why did you come,
While you previously decided to go?
You were my life dream
Changed into worst nightmare
Now you are my life pain
With grief  you tie me with a strong chain
None of us letting the other alone..

Dad, daddy, papa, pappy,
Titles double my life's severe pain
What about you Mr. Fate?
Do you know how much you were mean?
Happy now, putting me in ever highest pain rate?
I wish you were a father,
And feel the same as I suffer
But since you would never,
Take me to him, please, don’t wait
At least
My heart then would stop to beat
My flooding tears would fade
That I am with him at last
able to kiss..even his feet

Author's Note

the son was dead as soon as born, everyday kisses, the how are you and such things are somthing imaginery, i said i was promised oh him meaning waiting his arrival for 9 months..

Reviews

[MOON]

Poignant , touching write Khalid.

[Mockingbird]

i thought it was very sad. there can be nothing more painful than losing your child. it's also very sad that you could have no closure. deeply emotional, really expresses the pain. great job.

[The Pain Stays Fresh]

Very touching and emotional.

[tigerfight]

1. "So all I can do
Is that I kiss you"

Those lines didn't make sense.

2. "But..
You make me feel want to die
because, however I try,
You never reply
Come on, tell me
Why doing that to me?"

Try:

But,
You make me feel like I want to die
because however hard I try
you never reply.
Come on. Tell me.
Why are you doing this to me?

3. "Away of such hateful earth"
Try: Away from the hateful earth

4. "Why were I promised of you"
What does this mean?

5. "Happy now, putting me in ever highest pain rate?"
Awkward phrasing.

6. "kiss..even"
The .. do not further your purpose.

This was quite sad, but I did like the rhyme on "beat" and "feet" in the last part of the poem.

[Bidu Ibrahim]

This is a touching piece Khalid! Thanks for sharing.

[A Jainam Mehta]

Telling sincerely that your words touched my heart. wonderful sentiments.