fool idol

worst when you love someone who is in love

For long time,
My heart has been
Beating of love to her
So I decided to declare
How much i do really love her
So, to dinner in a romantic place,
I have invited her
The night before;
Shaved my beard
My ever best suit,
Was what I wore

 

What a place!
Very nice breeze
Romantic music
While we were sitting

 face to face
Shall I now tell her
About what I feel?
I started to feel my heart dancing
When she started, to tell me
About the secret she wanted
Me to share
That I am nice,
I always care
Sure!
Tell me! Let me share!

 

She started to tell me..
How much she loves him
And she wants me to help her
To be able to be with him
Oh no…
Who turned off the light?
Or that's me who got blind?
Where am i? what happened?
She continued..
I have already heard
He is your friend
So I need your recommend
Let him notice me…

Why doesn’t she just stop?
How can I make her shut up??
Her voice which always was musical
Relaxing, comforting, peaceful
Is now my ever most dreadful
If she was a human being,
She would be more careful,
Or felt how much it is painful
To talk only about him
While she was with another one
If she has some sense
Some little intelligence
She would observe
My annoyance
While she throws her bombs
She turned to be a hell stone
On me it was thrown
Burning the deepest in me!
He is my friend, shall I tell her
The truth behind him?
That for him, she isn’t the first one?
And she can never be
The last one
What if I tell her, and she tells him?
I will lose him then
And for her, she is already lost
When she fell in him
And now for me, she is completely forbidden
Let time then show us what would happen
And for me, it was killed
The love that
Never begun 

Author's Note

just written it

Reviews

[patricia]

I thought the line...while she throws her bombs...was very good in this.
You capture the twist and emotional love triangle realy well.
A good write.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very sad, but romantic story in this poem! very nice, Khalid!
~nia~

[just is]

Wow what a journey from the heart, so emotional it tugs somewhat. I really like this makes one think some. Nicely expressed & written.

[Ellie Howard]

beautiful

[Emilie Barn]

I like the beginning, how it starts, and the end, how it hits. It's really well written =))

[Susan Hymer]

Started off very positive I thought you were going to get the girl.A good twist at the end but sad. Well written I enjoyed reading it

[Brittany]

WOW. Really aweet at the start, but then it hit. haha Sounds kinda like high school drama. But really really well written. LOVED IT!!!

[Thea]

Experiencing unrequited love totally hurts a lot. It's hard loving someone who already loves somebody else. The emotions were sad here yet it flowed greatly in the lines. Very well expressed. Great work!
:)))

[Mockingbird]

this poem really lets us get into the mind of a man who is in this situation. sometimes women can be so oblivious we can't see someone's true feelings. or we just can't see how much better this person is for us. it's a big dilemma for you because you can't just turn off your feelings for someone, and it's even harder because he's your friend. the structure and flow came out really nice. it's her loss, habibi.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

i wish i could a hug right now!! this is so painfully inspiring!! it is really painful having to have someone you love not love you and to see her with another man!! Excellent poem!!!