just go

sometimes you like to sometimes to just leave you

You have never shown me
Any kind of interest
And you want me to make you
Feel you are the best!
That is really mean
Just think of it
You have finished your masters in hurting
And in causing pain, you got the degree of doctorate
That you have become a consultant
 in how to make people kneel
But if you have some sense you would feel
I have broken the chain
To which You kept my heart tied
You threaten of leaving
Why don’t you? just do it!
Don’t you know you have turned
To be a heavy rock on my chest?
I can no longer breathe because of it!
Just feeling you are there,
 make me feel much annoyed!
I wonder since you wanted to leave,
 why again you stayed!
I want you to leave
I want you to go
I want to close my eyes
And when back I open them
I find you have left

i want to hear from you, just one word

repeat after me if you dont know it

g o o d b y e , it is easy, isnt it?
I want to replace
you by emptiness!
I want myself to be
Back to me
Only one thing I want you
To take with you
When you go
Just take the feelings
Spoiled by you
Leave me, go!

Author's Note

thank you for reading( btw, what i write doesnt mean it is really about my own experiences, i try to express others' feelings, i try to be some others' tongue. )

Reviews

[Renée]

Well you sure expressed it well for not feeling it ! Excellent !

[Geraldine]

I loved the last four lines. ^^ haha so true.

[teapot]

thank you for this poem. i can relate to it.

[patricia]

you expressed this very well. very emotive. one spelling mistake in..empitiness! but dont ask me the correct way to spell it...my mind has gone blank. nice write. enjoyed.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very nice, and full of sadness...

[Igarin]

The love is embedded between the lines. It is a realization that someone although not good for us, we still want them to remain. Very good, a lot of passion.

[Marie]

There are 50 ways to leave your lover...or 50 ways to get them to go. You express somebody's good-by very well.

[Mockingbird]

sounds like the narrator has been in an oppressive relationship. one that was one-sided. through your poem you described a person who is selfish and hurtful. it's good the person has strength enough to kick the girl to the curb. your metaphors are ironically humorous. i enjoy your conversational style.

[MOON]

Great write , Khalid well said, poets like writers are observers of life , experience is a teacher but others experience is often what we write about . Understand sentiment in the poem some people leaving is freeing.

[Bidu Ibrahim]

Interesting piece! I do agree with you that the poet and persona are two different entities. Good job and thanks for sharing.