came to go

hmm

She came
just to tell me
How much now
She does hate me
I said,  ok, but why?
She said don’t ask me!
I said, am I dirt on your dress?
I can then give you needed Clorox
So you can simply mix
Your hatred with Clorox
To get rid of that dirt
If  you needed water
 use my tears
I can't
Really understand
What the reason of that change
Of your strong feelings towards me
In low voice, she started to say
That she can't stop feeling me
But she isn't belonging to me
So she has to hate me
And then she may
Go on her lost way
I felt..nothing to say
Now, I have to lie
And hope she is happy
Even if this happiness
Is a knife killing me

Author's Note

crazyily writing! excuse me

Reviews

[Bidu Ibrahim]

I like the way it's set up on the page and the feelings it is packed with.. It's a thought provoking piece too as far as love, hate and passion is concerned..
Good job Khalid and thanks for sharing.

[Melati]

your imagery is so passion, especially when you use the clorox as a metaphor for the "dirt and clean" no ones are clean Khalid. We are all equal, we are all sinners becuse we are only human. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing !

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Its very emotional and original piece of the passions in relationship...I liked the dialogue, and form of the poem, to not forget everyone has his own "point of view"; how happiness of someone can kill you?
~nia~

[?]

A kind caring heart always wishes for the other to be happy no matter how much it hurts...very emotional piece..
Like the structure here..looks like a person with a hat on....lol
Heartfelt piece