Adam

what if Adam hadnt eaten the apple?

In paradise, Adam was so proud
Everything he could taste, only apples, not allowed
But once with Eve, he was walking around
When he heard Satan calling aloud
Hey Adam why are you so coward?
You are very obedient but what is your reward?
Eating from the best tree, you are not allowed!
Come on ! eat it and see how much you will be powered!
You will be immortal in this world
And unfortunately, the same was what Eve added
Adam lifted his hand to the apple and picked
One and started to eat it
Then to earth he was sent
As a punishment
and we still suffer from it
oh Adam! I hope you hadn’t eaten it!

Author's Note

imagine what if Adam hasnt eaten the apple!

Reviews

[ghost writer]

same difference..regardless of who ate the apple..they would have shared with each other..but truly the real reason Adam is the one who was chosen to be tempted was because women are much more vilified in the bible as they were seen as a lower member of society..

[luviva]

ohh the imagination, great friend to man. you can imagine all you want but we are sentenced to suffering, eat from our sweat and all. only if he hadn't tasted it!!
nice write pal congs

[khalid]

thank you so much

[Renée]

If they hadn't ..someone by now would have...

[Thea]

Well, I quite wonder too if he hadn't eaten the apple. o.O
Anyway, you raised a nice topic here...Great insight.
Well done!
:)))

[Geraldine]

Adam was an example of not just give up or fall into temptations. ^^ interesting write.

[recantichize]

but one has to decide if blind obedience, or experience is more important. well done.

[MOON]

Nice write . Age old story giving into temptation. Life as we know it supposedly began with Adam and Eve so maybe not a bad idea to be tempted

[Mockingbird]

it was eve who was tempted by the serpent. when adam saw what she was doing he did it too because he didn't want eve to be punished alone. i feel bad for adam. and now they had to be banished from paradise.goes to show how some people could be so gullible. how great a man's love for a woman can be. and how easily seduced a woman can be. nice lesson. excellent topic for a poem.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Eating the apple was actually the logical end and logical beginning, if that wasnt happen the world and Paradise, which is not what we imagine, would be endless!
Adam should eat the apple, and Eve should help in that, the sin is just the New life, but how people have birth in this life??? It was impssible not to happen, and even was trap and plan...
~nia~

[Kate W]

If only we didn't give in to temptation so easily......

[tk]

that was an amazing recreation of where all things began. :) loved how you chose your words. it was obviously from the bible but you've written it with a twist. and the rhyming scheme is just flawless. such an interesting piece.. :)
thanks for sharing this great write!!