caring

is caring enough to get love?

 

I hear your silence

I see you even if my eyes are closed

I feel your presence

Either you are far away or so closed

I breathe your essence

Specially when no perfume is used

I can feel your tense

When you start to feel bored

You are my compass

You can direct my mood

So it doesn’t make sense

When you can't find your road

And you get in a mess

That you heartily pray to Lord

To give you strength

To lighten your load

Even if this load

Is

me

Reviews

[Renée]

So tender your heart song..you take her completely in and yet you are uncertain of where you stand in her life... I find it interesting, how every sentence starts with upper case, except the last word. Which is "me" it adds to the vulnerable feeling in your poem.. I mined and found a gem ( :

[khalid]

such sweet hands must find gems when they mine..

[Renée]

I bet you say that to all the girls lol

[khalid]

if you say..ok.

[Everett DeValle]

A really deep and introspective write Khalid...I truly enjoyed how you expressed your longing. Nicely done.

[Jeremy Baker]

Nice introspective style.

[Bidu Ibrahim]

'Even if this load is me' Do we have the courage to say this for real?...... A very powerful piece Khalid!

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Its really full with sadness, emotional and real! I like it...

[Egoless]

very nice! good flow and really emotion provoking

[EMMIE]

Great flow and rhythm, reads very smoothly. It's from the heart. Great work!

[paradise]

hmm very nice

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Such emotions expressed within the words in this poem... nice, enjoyed.

[Mockingbird]

the lover always puts his lady on a pedestal. then he puts himself down as if he is only a burden to her or is undeserving of her love. it's sad to see when the lover always puts himself down.