feel my life

My fingers

Your way...

My pain...

.

.

Rain,wind, me...

Alone with your dream...

Tik...tak...tik..t..ak..

No....n..o

I'm not crying

It's rain

Upon my eyes...

I don't call your members

It's wind....

And

My fingers

Don't feel your hair

.

.

All right

I'll die

Please comeback...

Please.

Reviews

[AWickedMoon]

A very unique writing style. :)

[keyvan]

Thank you

[Will]

Very unique piece, unlike anything I've ever read previously. The onomatopoeia and the short, quick lines make this piece easily read, but very deep and intriguing. Nice write, I hope to see something like this again soon.

[keyvan]

Thank you

[Holly Mason]

interesting style....so sad though hope they come back
thank you for sharing

[keyvan]

thank you....

[Jack...]

Definitely a different and exciting style of writing. I liked this.

[keyvan]

Thank you....

[KurKota]

Very unique style here.... You do a fine job of conveying the pain of loss. Just a small technical thing..... a misspelling...Apon...Upon ?

[keyvan]

oh.....allright....Thank you.