feel my life

My fingers

Your way...

My pain...

.

.

Rain,wind, me...

Alone with your dream...

Tik...tak...tik..t..ak..

No....n..o

I'm not crying

It's rain

Upon my eyes...

I don't call your members

It's wind....

And

My fingers

Don't feel your hair

.

.

All right

I'll die

Please comeback...

Please.

Reviews

[emily rose]

i felt all the pain u have plus all my pain

[keyvan]

thank you......

[Sami Khalil]

I felt the pain in this write...Well penned...:)

[Arun Paul Kapur]

I felt I could relate my pain and happiness to this. Bravo

[keyvan]

thank you...::)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

What I really like in your poem it is relatable, anybody can relate to your story. Good work. :)

[keyvan]

Thank you my friend...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome :)

[Souladareatease]

Such Beauty in sadness!!!

[keyvan]

Thank you......

[The dark story]

it's nice and sweeet ...
"No....n..o
I'm not crying
It's rain
Upon my eyes..."...i liked these lines ...they are really sweet

[keyvan]

thank you...

[The dark story]

always welcome

[Scarlet Alice]

when I read the title and the first verse didn't quite get. hahaha but yeah never judge by the title. really great in a sense that you are using a unique style to express such pain. :) very nice.

[keyvan]

Thank you...

[PurpleQuartz]

Great write! Very nicely woven and deep!

[emmajoy]

Seems like a repeated coming and going into sadness, into pain .. beautifully written. A painful read but undoubtedly more painfui for the writer.

[keyvan]

thank you

[Junert]

Refusing and accepting. Hating and loving. A confused state. Nice write.

[keyvan]

Thank you..