FALLING IN LOVE AGAIN

I was listening to Marlene when a friend told me of a triangle conflict

Sitting in my room alone, 
Writing with tears on the wall
A haunting sound drifting towards me, 
From somewhere down the hall  (“Falling in love again”)

How did I arrive in this situation?
How did I fall under the stress?
Could it be more complicated?
I have to answer yes!                  (“Never wanted too”)

Torn between encapsulating dreams,
Both caring so of others.
Both hearts lifting in different ways,
Yet both needed now as lovers. (“What am I to do?”)

Marlene’s song had a problem, 
Always made the wrong choice.
I may have similar problems 
But cannot give them voice.      (“I can’t help it”)

Perhaps I could re-write the world 
As I choose the pair of you
What harm there is will soon subside
As I always wanted two!            (“Loves always been my game”)

To choose one heart? Perhaps I may!
Feeling sorry for one who’s left,
But could I control the urge inside
Or would I be bereft?                (“Play it how I may”)

To change my heart,
Unhinge the feelings
Would leave me no choice
Would be too revealing.            (“I was made that way”)

Best to struggle, 
Indeed in hope
Holding the pain inside
Trying best to cope.                  (“I can’t help it”)


“Men cluster to me like moths around a flame
And if their wings burn, I know I'm not to blame

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GYXg7LlzyO8&feature=related”

Author's Note

Marlene if you want to here the song ...http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GYXg7LlzyO8&feature=related

Reviews

[Alessander]

this is very intricate and shows good craftsmenship. I almost didn't notice the abcb rhyme scheme or even how the lines in the paranthesis tells a story in itself, while simultanously complementing the rest.

The last two lines are my fav. That is a motif that has been done before, but the wording and imagery and lyrcism of it here are...poetic.

Great stuff.

Oh, and on a sidenote, ppl (like me lol) are usually lazy. I would prob embed the song in your author's note, kinda like what I did with the poem "shhhhh" for your readers to hear the song if they so chose. Just an option.

[Muse]

very unique how you displayed your words and thoughts. My favorite part is the ending,
Men cluster to me like moths around a flame
And if their wings burn, I know I'm not to blame

this is somewhat cliche, but fits in very nicely.
you managed to make this your own.

[Maya Storm]

Love the arrangement, it made for a pleasant read. The story itself was spectacular choosing a different path... re-writing the song :) I very much liked that.

[Ruth]

Astounding piece! The structure is great..each bracket containing a powerful few words...that speak on their own...amazing work...a fav!
xx