Sting of life

For a contest

Sting of life,
sting of love,
Sting of Hatred,
Why Am I being adored.

Sting of chocolate,
And of fake lies,
Sting of Anger
And all the butterflies

Sting of the government
Sting of politics,
Sting of the countries,
Living side by side

Yet We live,
yet we love,
Yet we stand
And we Stay..

We stay in bliss,
though the world is in deep s**t,
Though We got a lot of problems,
But does it hurt,
if we take just a little time,
And smile....

Author's Note

Wrote this for a contest.....

Reviews

[poetic soul]

its all sinking and its in a deep s**t but of coz, you always need to take time out and smile.... nice concept... loved these lines the best:

Sting of chocolate,
And of fake lies,
Sting of Anger
And all the butterflies

nice way to say that sometimes in this big bad world, even the good things hurt and we do not realize it were good and let them pass by!

:) Smiles,
Poetic Soul

[Emily B]

It is always good to take a little time and just smile. No sense in obsessing over the things we can't change.

[justjenn_2u]

Sometimes when we sit back and take a deep breath through all the adversity, we can relish ourselves in a moment of happiness - as this poem tells me.

I love the flow of your words and your thought process here.

Way to go!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Is it a song?
Because the way you have written it will surely make it a great song...
I loved the sense of complexity in it a lot...But I also agree with Imperfection regarding its sudden ending, may be you can work over it?
But great work overall!

[Imperfection]

I do not know what made you write that you want to delete it. It sounds pretty good to me.

But what does it hurt, -- the word 'what' seems out-of-place here.

Other than that, the only suggestion I could make is about the ending. I think that it ends all of a sudden. Maybe it is only because this is an enjoyable piece and the fact that it ends so soon makes me perceive the ending as abrupt.

The words here reflect your never-say-die attitude quite strongly.
Good one again.

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

it really good!!!!

[S.J.Floreen]

I liked the repeticion of the word sting.

[Tammy]

Good poem..

Tammy