Life Love Long

Love is a wonderful thing. Too bad it doesn't happen with two people at a time.

How do I say,
That I love you?
YOu come to me, You talk
Seems to me that the world has stopped

How do I say
That I love you!?
You smile, YOU make me wonder
Whether Angels still wander?

In this world, Full of evil,
Being in love, is a sin against the devil,
But, I dare
Dare to keep loving you

But, When you want me,
Want me to tell you,
how much I care about you,
What should I do now?
Being stuck in this fix now?

Okay, Okay, give it a rest,
I'll give my best.

I'm poor with the words,
But I'll give it a shot

I care about you,
more than the evil inside
Trapped in this world,

I feel for you
More than the pain in
In the soul of this prison,

This world is full of pain,
Full of suffering,
Full of hatred,

But that does not mean that
That all the love is lost
Hope has evaopared from heart

A smile has not lost to a frown,

Plenty of darkness, if you look around,
But a little light, brings that to an End

Author's Note

This is another lyrics for my band. I wrote it for The girl whom I care for the most and will continue to do so. But, as I said earlier, she does not love me. Isn't life sad?

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This piece of lyrics is both good as well as quite off beat at few places!
But that's fine as the rhythm matters the most I guess..So, sometimes to convey the feel we could mold the lyrics as per our wish!
The emotions has been very well conveyed too!
The best thing in this world in to love and to be loved and..the next best thing is to love and love..unconditionally!

[Imperfection]

Great. I like this one too, although I am unable to decide at this moment whether I like it more than 'Bleeding Heart' or not.

I am not confident about offering my suggestions here...since this is a song, the way you've chosen to compose it maybe different from my interpretation of it. Any addition/subtraction would not fit in with the rest of the mood.

But I will still say that 'Being stuck in this fix now?' ...could be better phrased, I think.
evaopared = evaporated

Good one. Has this one been set to tune, already?

[Janyce Helen Van Es]

Yeah, I have experienced that with a guitarist in another band years ago-Love can be quite cruel.

Do you write all the lyrics for your band?

[Legion]

In this world, Full of evil,
Being in love, is a sin against the devil,
But, I dare
Dare to keep loving you


Not sure if that stanza works. If it is a sin against the devil then I'm not sure it would be a dare to keep doing it. More of a requirement.

As for the rest, I'm not sure I see a song here (most have a more definitive rhyme scheme), but the love is there and can be seen. A few typos and grammatical errors, but with some re-editing that can be fixed. Would love to hear it sometime to get a better feel for it.

[Mysty Rayn]

Sounds like you did just fine with the words to me. She would be a lucky girl.