I Can't Sleep

A song I wrote about letting go of the things holding you back, the things that may scare you the most...

Look down

At the scars that you've made.

Look up

At this world that you've saved.

You gave me the sun

Took away my pain

Just to turn around

And make it rain.

 

No I don't know

How to help you

This is all so new to me

Tell me something

will I change for you?

well who do you want me to be?

 

I can't sleep

with the ghosts of my pasts still knocking on my door

I can't hear you anymore

No I can't see

through the shadows of the ones I've lost but I've loved before

Where are the ones I'm fighting for?

No I can't sleep.

 

For so long

I've held it all in

now it's time

to let go

of the past.

Now I sit alone

with no one but my mind

dangerous

did it happen too fast?

 

No I can't sleep

with the ghosts of my past still knocking on my door

I can't hear you anymore

No I can't see

through the shadows of the ones that I've lost but I've loved before

Where are the ones I'm fighting for?

No I can't sleep.

 

Now the cages that I keep locked up at night

All those monsters start to put up a fight

If you can't keep them away it's alright

But if I get too scared will you turn on the light?

Turn on the light, yeah...

 

I can't sleep

with the ghosts of my past still knocking on my door

I can't hear you anymore

I can't see

through the shadows of the ones I've lost but I've loved before

where are the ones I'm fighting for?

 

No I can't sleep

with the monster that I thought I slayed still layin' on the floor

can it whisper its lies anymore?

No I can't see

Through the eyes of a blind man screamin' "I've seen this all before!"

where are the people I used to adore?

No I can't sleep.

 

Author's Note

Review please!

Reviews

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I may sound like a detail-b*****d, but I noticed an error - fourth stanza, last line: it should be "too" instead of "to". xD
I like the poem. It's kinda dark and sad, but still powerful, especially because of the repeating stanza. I think that one packed a punch to the poem.
And collaborative work sounds like fun! But writing a good rap isn't easy, so I'm interested in how it will turn out in the end.
Be sure to send me a read request once it's finished!

[A. V. Madison]

Oh Tom darling, you could never even be considered as a b*****d.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Well thank you, Maddie! :D

[afra]

i don't see any errors ....and this poem is beautiful

[Tai Ryens]

I don't think I saw any errors.
This would make a great song, and the repeating stanza is written greatly. I enjoyed this, and I love how you ended with fear of the 'monster' rising from the grave that you placed it in. Great job!

[Pax]

all i can say is beautiful, enjoyed it. it will be great for a song. just go for it. good luck.

[Mr.Cardigan]

i think its awesome cant wait to get started but in my opinion i think its long so i think when we work on it some stuff might have to go when we make it a song

[Olivia Marie]

I didn't see any errors, but I loved it! It was marvelous. Beautiful! It got to me on a level inside I thought only I knew. Wonderful. :D