I Can't Sleep

A song I wrote about letting go of the things holding you back, the things that may scare you the most...

Look down

At the scars that you've made.

Look up

At this world that you've saved.

You gave me the sun

Took away my pain

Just to turn around

And make it rain.

 

No I don't know

How to help you

This is all so new to me

Tell me something

will I change for you?

well who do you want me to be?

 

I can't sleep

with the ghosts of my pasts still knocking on my door

I can't hear you anymore

No I can't see

through the shadows of the ones I've lost but I've loved before

Where are the ones I'm fighting for?

No I can't sleep.

 

For so long

I've held it all in

now it's time

to let go

of the past.

Now I sit alone

with no one but my mind

dangerous

did it happen too fast?

 

No I can't sleep

with the ghosts of my past still knocking on my door

I can't hear you anymore

No I can't see

through the shadows of the ones that I've lost but I've loved before

Where are the ones I'm fighting for?

No I can't sleep.

 

Now the cages that I keep locked up at night

All those monsters start to put up a fight

If you can't keep them away it's alright

But if I get too scared will you turn on the light?

Turn on the light, yeah...

 

I can't sleep

with the ghosts of my past still knocking on my door

I can't hear you anymore

I can't see

through the shadows of the ones I've lost but I've loved before

where are the ones I'm fighting for?

 

No I can't sleep

with the monster that I thought I slayed still layin' on the floor

can it whisper its lies anymore?

No I can't see

Through the eyes of a blind man screamin' "I've seen this all before!"

where are the people I used to adore?

No I can't sleep.

 

Author's Note

Review please!

Reviews

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I may sound like a detail-b*****d, but I noticed an error - fourth stanza, last line: it should be "too" instead of "to". xD
I like the poem. It's kinda dark and sad, but still powerful, especially because of the repeating stanza. I think that one packed a punch to the poem.
And collaborative work sounds like fun! But writing a good rap isn't easy, so I'm interested in how it will turn out in the end.
Be sure to send me a read request once it's finished!

[A. V. Madison]

Oh Tom darling, you could never even be considered as a b*****d.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Well thank you, Maddie! :D

[Phillitup]

Such prolonged sadness. The emotions of this race through my head and my heart at once. I feel like fainting from the utter rush this piece has provided. No lie. Eloquent and convincing. Stunned into utter silence...
Nicely penned, best regards,
Dell Philby

[Simmirose]

This is Amazing! Can't wait to read more. Excellent job

[aisling virginia]

So amazing! Keep writing!!!

[Amanda]

I absolutely love this! My favorite poem of you so far! It flowed so easily and was clever and deep. I'm seriously adding this to my favorites.

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this poem is SOOO amazing! i love this! keep it up!

[MadiKay]

This is SO good! I really do like it! (:

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks girly!

[MadiKay]

Mhm. :)

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

:}

[Admiral Kirk]

This is a true masterpiece. I can feel everything you're feeling when I read your poem. I can sort of relate, I've loved a lot of people but none of my loves has ever loved me back. It helps to read something you can sort of relate to. And this was so well written, I feel like you're really passionate on this particular topic. Great poem!

[Rachael32123]

Beautiful song but almost made me tear up ahha. My eyes are just sweating no big deal :P

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Lol

[Rachael32123]

:P don't laugh at meh!!!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

:P sorry, I can just relate to sweating from my eyes XD

[Rachael32123]

HAHAHAH XD

[MandaBear]

Awesome song!!!!!!!!! Brilliantly done :)

[A. V. Madison]

You know whats funny? (On a totally unrelated note.)

We were just talking about how we both can't sleep. o.o





MINDBLOW xD

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

XD Maddie dahling, you must be psychic! :P

[A. V. Madison]

Hell yeah!!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

XD!!!