Stay

As I sit alone

I need quite to think.

Feels like I'm in love with a phone.

Lower I sink.

 

It's all I can do

not to break down and cry

I almost wish you would call

part of me doesn't know why,

 

So I'll hold on to this

as long as you'll stay

but after this I hope

I'll be okay.

 

Author's Note

I know it's short, but it means alot to me. Please hold back on the negative comments.

Reviews

[A. V. Madison]

Gawjus, my dahling!!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Haha! Thanks! X3

[Pax]

so sad, hopefully you could get over someday. great write, so short but speak so much.

[Olivia Marie]

I can feel this. I loved it :)
Sometimes being short is the best way to get something across.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Kenzie rhymes! :D
But I must point out the fact that you changed your rhyme throughout the poem. The first stanza is abab, and the other two are abcb. Just thought I should mention it, since I sometimes change the rhymes without noticing it in my poems.
Anyways, good poem!

[no sun]

When poetry is personal is when it is real poetry. No idea why somebody wouldn't call you....an excellent poem about cyberlove. (oh so I am guessing)

[PaperLife]

THis is such a filled up poem. I mean really, because it just oozes feeling. The depth and passion, the pain wraps around me as I read it, and understand it so solemnly. There is nothing negative to say about this poem. The words fall off the page into my heart all while being crookedly strung up by feelings that never will quite go away. The depth is being swept about in a painful yet loving way. This poem whispers inside the ears of hurt, begging for a moment to quit bleeding. This is beautiful, fading and glowing weaving into and out and around life and love and passion. Well done. :)

[Siena - Silent Awakenin..]

Nice use of enjounment here, i really like your style! It reminds me of the poems I used to love writing, before I decided to write longer type poems. My favourite stanzaa, is the second:
'It's all I can do
not to break down and cry
I almost wish you would call
part of me doesn't know why,'
You make the reader feel so vunerable, as the hidden meaning can be interpreted in many ways. This was good, guurl. Thanks for the upload.

[AK]

Very nice poem! I liked it a lot:) Keep writing!

[Lydia]

Very good.