Kitten

The only note I have is that I wrote this when I was ten, if you were wondering about that one part where it says that. Thought I'd leave it the way it was instead of changing it.

A fish in a pond, a young girl in a tree,

what all is the difference to me?

 

A kitten, stuck in a tree.

Calling out it's needing cries of meow, meow, meow.

Now what would I be doing,

if I were the young girl in the tree?

Would I be crying out, reaching out, giving out

all my love and help to that kitten,

that kitten stuck in a tree?

No, I would be crying out for my own selfish needs.

 

But sometimes life is like that, sometimes I feel like a kitten,

just stuck up high in a tree.

No reality to surround me. No parents to love me.

Not a friend to understand me. And no shoulder to cry on.

 

Sometimes I wonder, am I really a ten year old girl?

Or am I dream for some little girl, one she likes to play with every night?

Maybe that's why I feel so alone.

No one can see me, can love me, can hold me,

Like that poor little kitten, all stuck in a tree.

 

But it's still the same stroy in the end, I think.

There is still a kitten, still stuck in a tree,

 still calling out pitiful cries of meow, meow, meow.

Now follwed by a young girls vioce, still crying out,

still ignoring the kitten to her own selfish needs.

 

Please remember, in the beginning,

the fish in the pond who started it all.

 

Where is the fish?

Well now

I shall tell.

He's down

 in the pond,

where me

 and the

kitten

 

both

 

fell. 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

I like the message that this poem offers. It's speaks to me of mankind's seemingly innate ability to not look at others before themselves, at the same time, it speaks of inaction. We reach places in our lives where we want help. The kitten cries out, because it knows someone may hear it. The child has to choose to cry out or not, and when they don't they often fall in the pond. This piece really makes one think. Nice job!

Aaron

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this story. I hope you and the kitten are Okay. i like the movement of words and thoughts in the poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

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VERY NICE WRITE! i really did like this, the whole comparison concept is very nice :)

[closed..acct]

I love this, this is wonderful

[Rae Elizabeth]

Amazing (:

[hmm]

Simply wonderful, love the message in this write. Nicely done.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Amazing! I love it how you connected your message with a story. It's very deep, and I can relate to some of it (obviously not to the part where it says: "am I really a ten year old girl?" XD). But I like it very much!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

This prose, reeks of perfection, I think, maybe without proof, that you have worked on this quite hard, well done, good read.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Thanks so much guys! You are all so awesome :)

[xSamilynnx]

really good i remember u showed me this i like it alot still :D :) good work keep writing sis!!!