Midnight Scowl

Kind of a mysterious, heavy, painfully sad type of thingy.

The rage flosting wiht the leaves, like bats

Striking at things they don't like, don't understand

Miscommunication lingers like the sly black cats

Macabre illusions seem to claim the upperhand.

 

Mystery shrouded with fear, look away

Don't let the shaking trees claim your sanity

The piercing shreiks cloud the moon's ray

Love replaced with scars, cheers filled with sour vanity

 

The pain that night, the blood shed in bloom

The tearing excuses, the tears filled with horrid surprise

Was that beast destined for a bullet since the womb?

Or was my dark lonely funeral what left tears in your eyes?

Author's Note

Thanks for reading :) Please review honestly <3

Reviews

[aisling virginia]

Aaahhhhhh!!!! This is such a good poem. I have no words honestly. I tell you again and again how talented you are and now it's starting to lose its meaning xD anyway, absolutely love it. The imagery is amazing and I am still impressed by your talent at rhyming... c:

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Lol thanks chicky :3

[aisling virginia]

Lol no problemo chica! :P

[Becky]

Only two things- in the first line, I'm pretty sure you meant "with," not "wiht." :P And also, it's "shrieks," not "shreiks," I think. Sorry, spelling like attacks my brain and beats it with a sledgehammer until I fix whatever error it is.

But for the actual poem- it's quite excellent! Especially the ending, which actually made me twitch a bit because it was so powerful.

Just overall, my response is a sort of strangled squawking noise because there's not really anything else to say. It's incredibly well written. Lovely work! :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Tragic events will always change us, that is why we need to be reborn again and adjust to our new life.

A very cool, poem for being so dark. Excellent work.

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Thanks for the review c:

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Welcome.

[The Analog Kid]

Very mysterious, but kind of cool. Lot's of cryptic references. Nice job!

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Thanks :)

[The Analog Kid]

YW anytime:)

[Invisible]

hate to be that guy but there are some minor spell issues, such as the first line where with is written wiht, and shrieks is written shreiks. other than that i like this poem overall.

[. - .]

HEYYY KENZIIEEEEEEEEEEE :D

Oh alright
Honestly
I hated this poem
"chokes"
I LOVE THIS POEM
So depressing, so sad, or am I just emotional? O.o
I don't know..
But it's so sad!
The last paragraph made me feel guilty of something... Still trying to figure out what it is 0,o
AH OKAY I TRULY LOVED THIS

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

Haha thank you so much my deeear :3

[&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;]

I had a feeling XD c: