The Winds of Change

I've been working on this one for awhile, I hope you like it!

The winds of change are blowing, dear

But my heart beats slower still

I was dead without you here

You must be darling or be road kill.

 

Let the sirens shout their fatal song

For I may have misled myself too far along

Can you pull me out of this foresaken well?

This lie does not exisist, my story, you must not tell.

 

The winds of change are decreasing to mild

Though the smoke clears, you remain tragically silent

With the mind of an elder and the eyes of a child

Through the days, my thoughts grow violent.

 

My mind is calming, my thoughts conforming

New regions, my soul was exploring

But reality  is hunting down my crippled heart

The pain comes too early for the fun to start.

 

The winds of change have shaken the dead

Yet I've left you so much more to wonder

Did you hold that gun up to my head?

Or did I send my own body six feet under?

Author's Note

Please be gentle with your reviews, this has a lot of deeper meaning to me.

Reviews

[Michael Thrower]

Whoa, the last stanza really caught me off guard. I was tranquilized by how you described the winds of change. It seemed like seasons going by as I read, then the last part gave a shock. It made me have to read the poem all over again. Now it seems so complex and emotional. You did a great job.

[RachelReaper]

I don't need to be gentle with my review, because the poem is already awesome, anyways! And, your the one who wrote it, so you know that. But, seriously, my favorite part of your poems is seriously at the end, because the beginning hooks you to read, the middle keeps you wanting to read, at the end you NAIL it, right on the head. :)

[Krista Weiss]

Wow!! Great job!!! :)

[Cerise]

Its very poignant..with lots of deep meanings...very beautifully penned..great work..:)

[afra]

Wow very deep and beautiful ....i love it ...good job

[deepblue04]

wow, i like the deep meaning, good job!

[Hester Vane]

The deep and personal meaning of this piece really comes through in the words. Great Job.

[kublakhan27]

I don't think you need worry about harsh reviews on this piece, it's brilliant, and the care and emotion you've put into it really shows...I don't even know what else to say, I'm speechless on this one...it's just perfect, one of the most intricate pieces of soul-searching I've read in a while :)

[Kadessa (Kaddy)]

Beautifully written. Really got me thinking
100/100

[Forever Hidden]

Gentle? Now why would I be gentle wifey? Tell me, WHYYY?!! XD jk


I like the flow in your write. And it is also gentle. Great!