Some Times

Um...poetry?

Author's Note

Sometimes the pain makes me want to fall
Sometimes I don't know what's the right call
Sometimes your voice sticks in my ears
Sometimes he's more then what appears

Sometimes I can tell you
Sometimes my heart runs away
Sometimes I'm a child too
Sometimes, could you come out to play?

Sometimes my thoughts float way out afar
Sometimes my heart reaches out to shooting stars
Sometimes I wish you'd love me back
Sometimes my love gets way off track

Sometimes I try to make sense of this madness
Sometimes I let wander just to watch where it goes
Sometimes I try to hard to block out the sadness
Sometimes it's the thing you can't see that really shows

Sometimes my mind moves slower then my legs to the door
Sometimes the shit hits the fan before my body hits the floor

Reviews

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Sometimes my thoughts float way out afar
Sometimes my heart reaches out to shooting stars
Loved those lines! 100/100 I love your poems!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

thanks so much! :D

[.]

you're welcome! :)

[afra]

another great write ...well done

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

thank you

[Hester Vane]

The repetition is great. And you handle a tricky subject matter well. Good Job.

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Good use of repetition. Sometime is a good word. Allow us to have options for thoughts and action. Good flow of thoughts and I like the ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thank you for the excellent review :)

[Krista Weiss]

Really good poem!! I can definitely relate!! :)

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks!! :)

[kublakhan27]

Very nice rhymes...this almost begs for a song, I'm not sure what kind of song but definitely a song lol

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks alot! And yea, I can totally see it being a song :)

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome, and definitely :)

[Wolfwind]

The last two lines in this made the poem for me, simply on the visual it brings. It's not every day you see a mind drifting towards a door while the legs are just sitting in the chair wondering what to do. Then the room getting sprayed with crap through one of the industrial fans, splattering against the person, who then stood there for a moment, thinking about how they should react, and so they just fall down.

The best thing in times of emotional turmoil and woe, is to turn it into a private joke that's so twisted and funny, you can't stop laughing... then things don't hurt so much. ;)

Keep writing out your soul! =)
Aaron

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thank you so much!

[A. V. Madison]

"Sometimes the s**t hits the fan before my body hits the floor/"

BAD. A*S.

I love this. Totally badass. Rating 100/100.

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks wifey XD