Some Times

Um...poetry?

Author's Note

Sometimes the pain makes me want to fall
Sometimes I don't know what's the right call
Sometimes your voice sticks in my ears
Sometimes he's more then what appears

Sometimes I can tell you
Sometimes my heart runs away
Sometimes I'm a child too
Sometimes, could you come out to play?

Sometimes my thoughts float way out afar
Sometimes my heart reaches out to shooting stars
Sometimes I wish you'd love me back
Sometimes my love gets way off track

Sometimes I try to make sense of this madness
Sometimes I let wander just to watch where it goes
Sometimes I try to hard to block out the sadness
Sometimes it's the thing you can't see that really shows

Sometimes my mind moves slower then my legs to the door
Sometimes the shit hits the fan before my body hits the floor

Reviews

[MandaBear]

Its wonderful!!

[Simmirose]

My favorite was the first stanza, but I can relate to the entire poem. Amazing Job! can't wait to read more.

[Hidden Happiness]

Sometimes i just wanna read your poems:-):-):-D.

[RachelReaper]

Last line was epic, it stuck out to me. I could see this being a type of song, it has a certain beat to it, you know? I like it, your repetition is right on target as well.

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks so much!

[RachelReaper]

:D

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

:)

[deepblue04]

I love it!!! Good job!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks :)

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Wow, just wow... This is really amazing and strong.
I can relate this... I can relate it all.
Great job!
Thanks for sharing!
100/100

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks :)

[Toni Blackerby]

this poem is crazily good lol sometimes i love other peoples poems more than anything else

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Aw! You're too sweet :) Thank u

[Toni Blackerby]

ur welcome

[Tabitha t]

Sometimes I read a poem and it motivates me to try to write poetry. and anyone who knows me knows I am a novelist not a poet. Lol this was one of those times. Great job!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks so much!

[Zainab UF]

Sometimes I'm insanely jealous of your writing skills. :D
No, seriously, this is a great poem! It had a song-like feel to it that I really loved, and the emotions were captured really well.

Great work, and thanks for sharing!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks for the review :D

[The Analog Kid]

Sometimes repetition is good:) One of those writes that makes you feel good when you're done..

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thanks!

[The Analog Kid]

YW :D