UNTITLED 2

..name ideas?

Then there's my friend- she never shares

Like me, but even worse, keeps everything inside

I want to be there for her, but she tells lie after lie

The attitude and drama she posses, actually, clings to.

 

I could never talk to anyone before

I've only recently opened up.

My spiritual gift; a blessing and a curse

To see things others don't until it's to late.

 

And you- you've shared more then I thought.

But what if you keep telling until it's nothing special?

My listening is nothing special? It was too late for me

well at least you got the help you needed.

 

Everyone is always laughing, always so happy

Even the brat pretends to know what's happening

But I don't know. Still stuck here.

Feeling all to alone. Discluded.

 

I find myself clinging to others and their needs.

I'll take a perfectly normal stranger, get to know them

Help them along as much as I can, just waiting to see

if the advice I give will ever repair what I've broken.

 

So when I curl up in a ball tonight, crying out in pain,

letting the hurt leak out of me, it won't be enough.

I'll cry myself asleep without a word, no one to help.

Being the follower no one will remeber when the battle is over.

 

And it will remind me of the last night and the night before.

Because everytime the sun goes down, it's the same

Painful, lonely, then dead sleep. Ignore it all tomorrow.

But really, I need someone. I need you! Come hide me from reality

 

Because as my trusted ones dwindle,

So do the smiles that keep it all hidden.

 

Author's Note

Two of two. What do you think?

Reviews

[writingurl14]

wow I love both of them! I think maybe you should name it pain.. because both mention your pain and how it affects you.. I'm sorry about everything that you have been through.. it must be hard... I hope everything works out and hopefully you will continue writing because you have a great talent

[Simmirose]

This I beautiful and Breath taking. I can totally relate to this I focus on helping others so that i can forget about my problems. I pretend behind a smile that everything is fine when in all I Just want someone to talk to. Thank you for this. Its inspitational

[外人 (Gaiji..]

that's such a beautiful confession, you've opened yourself up to us completely, a few are so brave, me personally I'm not. You've painting for us a beautiful painting where the subject is you, in every element of your character, in every idea of your mind, even in the way you see the world. Great job !!!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thank you! Thank you so much! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with a very good story. Hard to trust people with story of fear and pain. I like the description of someone who is afraid to express her fear and pain. I believe we must be careful. The mind is a wild place with many thoughts. Can trust few to inner secrets and desires. I like the way you ended the excellent poem.
Coyote

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate the good review :)

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Awwww, this is so sad. And I can relate. To keep trying to help others while not being able to get some help yourself is really known to me.
If you need someone to talk to, I'm here!
Oh, and I got the feeling that the beginning of this part was about Kurra. xD
And about the title, since it mostly deals with hidden pain, I suggest you name it similar to that, like "Locked Emotions" or "Buried Inside". I hope that helps.

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Tom!!! Thank you so much for your reviews, I really super appreciate it. I will consider these names, but I'm not quite sure yet.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Kenzie!!! xD You're welcome.

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

B)

[Mackenzie Brooke]

Coming up with titles are hard at times, but this is really good keep it up!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thank you!

[deepblue04]

This is good. Totally relatable. Good job!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Thank you so much!

[Tai Ryens]

Hmm... I'm not quite sure what to say about this. Though, I did enjoy much of these two parts, especially the ending. Well done.

[Peaceworker22]

A bit of advice for when you are finished with your poems, you can correct your spelling by using spellchecker. (sad smile) I'm moved, and speechless...

[J.L.]

Your seem point out our depidence on one another and the fact that we may not look like we are in pain but we can be. It was really nice, it had a nice flow to it, I enjoy reading your poems