You Stayed

You Stayed

A Poem by K.M

I cried that night, when you told me you were going away...
So that's why I was so happy
And when you told me over the phone, that you stayed just for me...
You made my whole week

© 2016 K.M


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Again you did a good job of writing about the emotional pitfalls of a relationship, sad that so many think of it as a game to be played. I give it four out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!
Your sentence structure is taking the flow from you poem, if it were my poem I would present it like this:

I cried that night
when you told me
you were going away...
So that's why I was so happy
And when you told me over the phone
that you stayed just for me...
You made my whole week

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Again you did a good job of writing about the emotional pitfalls of a relationship, sad that so many think of it as a game to be played. I give it four out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!
Your sentence structure is taking the flow from you poem, if it were my poem I would present it like this:

I cried that night
when you told me
you were going away...
So that's why I was so happy
And when you told me over the phone
that you stayed just for me...
You made my whole week

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

:) good. keep sharing your thoughts.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A nice ending to a excellent poem. Good to find happiness after learning sadness. Thank you Kenzie for sharing the poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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