The 8:00 pm Poem

You drove me home tonight
Then you asked me if I was alright
Because I was shivering
And I said I was fine
But the truth is...
I wasn't shivering because it was cold
I was shivering because I knew you were going to leave soon
I didn't want you too
That's why I won't tell you the shortcut to my house
I wanted you to stay with me
And when I saw the warmth in your smile...
As you sang that song on the radio...
I really wanted to know how your hand would feel in mine
But I told myself "No, not this time"
Because I wanted more days like this...
The days when you wished you had gum...
So you could kiss me
But in this moment, it was not the right time
And tonight as you drive home...
I know you'll be missing me
But that's okay..
Because I'll be up missing you too

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

For me the poem speaks of the excitement and anxiety of an emotional moment in time. Not only does one wish the moment to continue to find out where it might go, but at the same time there is hesitation because one doesn't know where it my go if it goes on to long. It's an emotional and mental stalemate. I felt the poem was relatable and the situation described to be timeless, as in it takes a topic most ages can find some connection to.

Great Ink!
Aaron

[Coyote Poetry]

Dear Kenzie. I do understand the poem.
"And tonight as you drive home...
I know you'll be missing me
But that's okay..
Because I'll be up missing you too"
In my life time. I left people too often. The poem tone create a real place and new loneliness to be born. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[softlyfall]

There is so much kinetic emotion in this, really well done.
Just one tiny detail... Line 8 should be I didn't want you TO not too

[Stan Lee]

Well, that's lovely. Nice poem Kenzie. :)

[Cheyenne]

Awe I really like this! I always hate goodbyes, even if they are only for the night. I definitely relate to this.

[A hare off]

"That's why I won't tell you the shortcut to my house" I loved this line. I very enjoyable and real feeling poem Kenzie.

[Inject Positivity]

Oh this is very sweet....There is a feeling of hint of pain inside the speaker because she is going to miss her beloved....There is a longingness in the poem....Beautifully done....The imagery is very sweet indeed....Full ratings.....

[Emily]

Loved it!
Keep on writing!!

[Bear]

Very relatable, at one time or another I think everyone has experienced or will experience a similar situation. My mother would have called it a fact of life moment, one of those things in life that builds character and can make you a better person. I always took that as her way of saying "don't cry over spilled milk" which was what my grandmother would have said. I always find it intriguing to read emotional works like this, to learn how others deal with and learn from one of life's many lessons. Well done Kenzia I give it four out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!