Your Most Scarlet Sin

I'm glad you told me...

But I don't know why

How could you tell them,

When they made you cry?

Now I'm alone

And I've been wondering all night

Doesn't this addict give you a fright?

Reviews

[Bear]

I fear I am with A hare off, I am unable to identify the 3 W's of your poem, the Who seems to be "I and you", the What is not clear so the Why is impossible. I like the sound of what you have, but it seems like you only told part of the story the rest may have been to personal and you left it out. Reconsider your thoughts and maybe you can add to what you have, giving life to the who, what and why :~)

[Stan Lee]

the third and fouth lines kinda threw me. this needs more for it to make sense and strike with your audience. raw and real. thanks for sharing. :)

[A hare off]

There is sad ribbon running through this wonderful little poem. I'm not sure I completely get it, but I can feel the loneliness.

[K.M]

Thank you so much A Hare Off, It means a lot. And I'm sorry that it doesn't really make sense... I actually wrote it an hour ago... Right after I found out about some things that have been happening to my best (who is also my boyfriend). And it just hurts really bad.