The Boy From Health Class

I wish I could talk to you... but you're so humble
How could someone like me
Talk to someone with such aesthetic quality like you?
Whenever you look over at me the color floods into my cheeks
And the butterflies come in waves of fifty
I can't breathe
I can't think
When I see you I can't talk
I can't speak the language that your eyes speak
But I want to learn
I know that I am awkward, but if I screw up...
Will you please give me another chance?

Reviews

[Stan Lee]

Hey, I love this! :) You have done an excellent job at expressing the emotion.

[KittyKatgirl]

Hi Kenzie :)
That was pretty good. I think most girls have that feeling seeing a boy that you can't help but stare at but you're always afraid you're going to stuff up.

[Debra White]

Hi Kenzie :)
I remember that feeling well when someone is just so beautiful that you can't even bring yourself to talk to them in case you make a mess of it. Sounds like a red hot crush to me.... show him the poem - he'll be impressed for sure :)
Nicely written, I enjoyed it very much.
Just noticed one little typo - 'but your (you're) so humble'
Kindest regards, Debra :)

[Brinleigh Bailey]

Really expresses your feelings well. Very sweet.

[Destiny Dreamer]

WOW! Amazing, if this is based on truth, then you must show this to that guy! Thanks for sharing. Amazing work!

[K.M]

Haha thank you so much dreamer :) And I actually did give this poem to him... he just rejected me after I did and no longer talked to me anymore... But it is now a good joke for me and my friends :)

[KittyKatgirl]

Naww at least you saw the funny side. Hope you'll find another boy who will love your poem.

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i like the simplicity of this. one criticism: 'your' in the first line should be 'you're'. keep writing.