In My Mind I Am Screaming

A piece I wrote from words chosen as part of a contest.

It’s nearly seven o’clock and here we sit.

Together in this little corner coffee shop.

Your eyes grow wide as your mouth begins to spasm.

And out tumble the mangled thoughts of your mind.

Your words crash into me with a crushing force.

I feel as though I am being trampled by a full grown moose.

Your voice…it’s so sweet; like the pulp of an apricot.

Yet your words have the bitterness of a chicory root.

They enter my head and curdle my mind into mush.

I’m no clairvoyant, but even I see what’s next.

I sit in silence, like a frumpy old wardrobe left hanging in an abandoned home.

You stand to leave, disgusted at my speechlessness.

As you brush past me to the door, only I can hear my silent screams.

I can do nothing now but watch you disappear into the street.

A phantom of what was…an eternal haunting of my heart.

Reviews

[Wicahpi]

Hi Kenny. Thank you for entering 10 Words I Give. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Heartbreaking, yes, as most relationships that end, are. I like the way you made use of each word, especially 'apricot' and 'bitterness', though all words were placed nicely within the story. Nicely done!

[Kenny N]

Thanks so much! It was a blast writing for it!

[Wicahpi]

I'm glad you enjoy participating! I enjoying the reading. You're welcome!

[Alexa Apothic Red]

Wow, this is amazing! I loved the personification of the mangled thoughts tumbling out and crashing into you. It's even more impressive that you pieced together such a touching, heartbreaking, and raw poem out of seemingly non-connecting words as part of a contest entry! You did so in a masterful way. I'm very impressed!

[saphy]

Respectively written Kenny and heart wrenchingly so. It's a numbness we can all sympathise with at some point in our lives. When as writers, our words when most needed, fail us. This writing will and for some time in the future be ageless as we meander along our paths in this life.

Bright blessings for what the future may hold for you.

saphy (x)

[Stan Lee]

Nice job! You did a great job of incorporating the words so seamlessly into this little piece. Enjoyed the read! :)

[Kenny N]

Thanks so much!

[zaisham9393]

The title caught my eye.You articulated your feelings so perfectly !
Loved it !