hope

If one great love be true,

Then I pray to one day find you.

I’ll remain eminent with hope

Like a kite loose in the wind,

Hopelessly cascading by with no rope.

 

I will weep in dismay.

For how soon till I lay,

With that sought for great love,

Embezzled in my desires,

Before push comes to shove?

 

To whom must I hail?

When till life will prevail?

Must I search any longer for what is sought?

Look beyond me and may you understand,

How truly hard I have fought.

Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

Katelyn, “hope” is an ideal title for this poem. In these three stanzas and fifteen lines, you’ve captured what embodies that often overused word.

You’ve crafted good end-rhymes and successfully incorporated other literary devices here. I did read several lines twice, maybe because the line was too long or packed with too much detail. Maybe it’s just me. I’m not an academic or scholar.

I want to read more of your work. This poem is proof you can certainly write and create a well-constructed poem. I wonder how you might read as free verse, a more casual flow. Still, this is good stuff. You work reminds me of Linda Marie Van Tassell’s poetry. You might check out her work, too. Good write!

[Katelyn Kennedy]

thank you so much for your constructive review. i'm not one much for poetry so i really appreciated your honesty and support.

[FGFRANKLIN]

Love is a many splintered thing...sort of like sitting on a locust fence. (smile) Everybody seems to be looking for it, playing hide and seek with it or getting shot through the heart with it on Valentine's Day. If there's "true love" doesn't that mean it lies sometimes? Or maybe that's just dishonest modesty. I pray you find your true love too and your kite doesn't get eat by a tree like good old Charlie Brown's. But if your string breaks you can always get a yo-yo and have a come and go love. I hate when those things catch you on the rebound though. I enjoyed the read, Keep up the great writing, Cheers from North Carolina.

[Lisasview]

I wrote a poem called hope many years ago and posted it this year... Very different from yours.
Your poem is good but and there is always a but...it could use a bit of work here and there to make it great..
Lisa

[Brad Dehler]

Very nice poem. I hope you have found your love! Have you? Beautiful imagery of the wind and kite, moving about in the turbulence of life. Fight on :)

[willweb]

I have been away for a while from this site and just trying to find my way around again. I saw you as one of the poets online at the time and thought I would check out your work and I am glad I did. I like the rhyme scheme of this and the overall message for without hope...I think most of us would have nothing too. This was wonderfully crafted, and I see it has been a while for you here as well...(hope)fully you will come back to writing here again sometime soon.

[Katelyn Kennedy]

Haha "(hope)fully." Thank you so much for your review and for the motivation!