Five Minutes

One day I look at the clock

Boy how time has passed 

How I treasure the ones I love 

In my heart, they under lock and key

When you lose one 

That you thought would be here forever

Just never thought this longing 

Would happen too me too

How I wish I had five more minutes 

With my grandfather

Who now lives in my heart 

And it aches for him so bad 

It causes me too be so sincerely sad 

Author's Note

Writen by both myself and my aunt Tarry :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with your thoughts in the poem. Minutes become important when the people we love are gone. I wish to hear the old voices of my elders everyday. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Lover Of Words]

Thank you

[DrD]

Know the feeling. Very well done and an enjoyable read.

[Lover Of Words]

Thank you

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

"In my heart, they under lock and key"
I believe that "they" should be "they're".

"Would happen too me too"
The first "too" should only have one "o".

In the last line, "too" should be "to".

Anyways. Kelsey, all of these poems that you post about your grandfather make me cry! It's been 4 months and I miss mine like crazy as well :( They're so beautiful and full of love, yet also full of loss, sorrow, and sadness. This is beautiful, and you can really tell that it was written from the heart. Great write Kelsey (:

[Lover Of Words]

Thank you Its been 3 for me and its killing me i have too say but i am doing my best Thank you for the kind review

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Yeah, it's still hurting me really bad too.. Some little thing will remind me of him, and I'll just burst into tears.. It's terrible, but I can't help myself :/ and no problem, it was a beautiful and enjoyable poem to read.

[Lover Of Words]

I know how you feel dear friend

[Tarry Franck]

Wishing the same!

[Lover Of Words]

I know! i think we all wish that

[C.C. Marx]

I know exactly what you mean, I think everyone would, including myself, would give anything for five minutes with a loved one that has passed nice write

[Lover Of Words]

Thank you for taking the time too review

[C.C. Marx]

No problem always a pleasure reading your work :)

[CreativeStroke]

This is a beautiful tribute to your grandfather! I love your style of writing and how you so easily express your emotions in every piece.

[Lover Of Words]

Thank you

[Erinne S.]

This was beautifully done Kelsey! So emotional and even tear-jerking. Well done! I always enjoy reading your work :)

~Erinne

[Lover Of Words]

Thank you

[Acron 4]

There are so many that I could say that about, but I really don't think Five minutes would ever be enough, I'm not being selfish, I don't think, but if I could get any of them back, I would only need a day, no, perhaps a day and a half, hmmmm no, Maybe 2 days.......I don't think if I ever got them back I would ever want them to go again. It's prolly better that those that have left us can't come back. However, when they entered your life, they as well entered your heart, and although they have left this earth, there still there in your heart and I guess that will have to do. Still, it would be nice to........oh well......good read

[Dr. Wood ?]

also check on..in my heart they under lock........Try they're instead of they...lovely sentimental write though all the same

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Lovely Kelsey and Tarry.........check on these things:
Would happen too me too Would happen to me too
It causes me too be so sincerely sad It causes me to be so sincerely sad

[Lover Of Words]

Thank you :)