Displaced

I was displaced

I never saw it coming

There were no storm clouds on the horizon

No red skies in the morning in warning.

 

I never saw it coming

I was just suddenly displaced

I found myself in Mahanaim

A long long way from home.

 

I do not belong here, I cried

I was made for a different place

This place is not my place

This place is not my home.

 

I want to be back in yesterday

I want to be back home

They speak a different language here

And my soul is longing for its home.

 

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Reviews

[TheJordBaker]

although I can not personally relate to the piece, you placed me into it as if I could, and that is a sign of a good write. very moving :)

[spiritwind]

Thank you TheJordBaker for the massively encouraging remark and the pun, inadvertant or not!!!

[lee von cleef]

No solutions , But my grad mother traveled the world, She would take special things of hers ,set them out on the dresser, the look of them made her feel at home. I worked at a camp and in about 17 days the kids would turn homesick too.

[spiritwind]

Thank you, Lee. Yoiur Grandmother was [is] a wise lady! A true nest-er!!

[JuniperPearl]

Very moving and easy to relate to. I can say that I have felt this way when I was actually relocated to somewhere new and was longing for home, as well as when I stayed but it seemed the world around me changed. Great visuals.

[spiritwind]

Thank you for the kind words, JuniperPearl!! These comments encourage as well as point out where I was doing my job right. :)

[JuniperPearl]

You're very welcome

[An owl on the moon]

Your words ache in that desire to return... to come back to the familiar... How you were taken away against your will.. without warning... Such a powerful sadness here.

[spiritwind]

Thank you, Craig. I am glad I was able to touch you with that sense of ache, that desperate yearning for how things used to be. Very kind of you to read and review and to let me know I transmitted that emotion.

[Tree]

Stirring, powerful, and sad. I read it several times over and each time it became more moving..

[spiritwind]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. There are so many pieces out there that you could have read and I am conscious of this honor. The displacement of the soul is anguish...

[Stanley Wilson]

great poem the last verse particular although all of it was brilliant oh yes i remember being displaced and the agitation i felt until i weedled my way back home

[spiritwind]

Thank you, Mr. Wilson for reading and commenting. I do like to make a memorable end to my poems so I am pleased that I did in this case. I'm so glad to hear you found your way back home where your soul belongs

[Rob Santana]

I can relate to your poem. Feelings That I've dealt with for many years,well written.

[spiritwind]

How sad that this poem has touched so many readers and done so with saddness, pain,and melancholy. I hadn't realized just how universal these feelings of displacement are.

[Rob Santana]

unfortunately yes,but it's also touching to know that other writers can write what others feel. It's amazing! Poetry in universal!!!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

I was displaced.....so this poem really hit home.

It hurt to read it....but then that's part and parcel of poetry. It stimulates the emotions and this one certainly done its job.

[spiritwind]

Thank you, John, for reading my poem and finding it valid. I am sorry though when it hurts to read it... but not sorry enough to stop writing such things. Yes, exactly, because it is part of poetry to burn you and then cast you to riding the thermals.

[MOON]

Hauntingly beautiful write.

[Summer D.]

Rhythm.

From my soul towards my feet.
Great.