iii

Each muscle tense
each feature glistening
as i lay still
with your movements stirring me
underneath a pale blue sky
turned black
by the yellow tinted moon

Reviews

[E.H. Monroe]

few can pound out real meaning in under the amount of space that fills a text box. You did. Mystery and intrigue.
an idea and color in almost every line.

turned black
by the yellow tinted moon

black blue and yellow like stages of bruising.


your flow is fire

[Christopher.Holmberg]

not your best.

[x]

This write feels tense and full of energy.
Like a wound spring in a giant clock.
The colours add different dimensions of feeling, each with its own direction.
Black is dark and passionate, yellow is promise and the blue is you.
Overall.. wonderful mystique dwells within this write.

[Jibey]

The tense muscle and the 'glistening' is evocative of love-making and the night sky is like a spectator to the magic moments