His Other Slipper

They cannot use that without its pair.

I did remember hearing this story,

When I was a child, when I believed in fairy,

About a young boy who walked by the sea,

And how his slippers touched the hearts of many.

He was with his uncle, one sunny day.

They conversed as they took the way.

The boy suddenly lost his one slipper and said,

"Oh, Uncle! My slipper was taken by the wave that drifted."

"Oh boy, we could swim in there to get it,"

Said his uncle who was then worried.

"But my slipper have gone far already,"

Replied the boy who seemed to be filled with curiosity.

He leaned down to get his other slipper.

He stood up and threw it to the sea.

"Oh precious boy, why did you throw your slipper,

Now I would have to get the two, you see?"

"No, Uncle. You need not swim and gather those.

I threw it so that a fisherman would find the pair,

And he could still bring those home for his son to use.

We didn't know, his son maybe running with his feet bare."

Author's Note

Review and rate, please. Thank you! :)

Reviews

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Hi Lunette. 'His Other Slipper' sounds like a lovely folk tale, and I admire your sensitivities in relating the story.
I did happen to struggle with the rhyme scheme, though. It seems confused. As with the rhythm overall. Would you consider making this a non-rhyming piece, perhaps? (incidentally, I did like the subtle rhyme of fairy and many in the first stanza)
I wonder if this would be greater as a free verse poem...
Thanks for sharing, and asking my thoughts - for what they're worth. :-)

[Lunette Lariz]

Thanks. ^_^

[Hamza]

cute story and love the boy for his thoughts ...
now nobody would even ever think that way in reality ... how cute ..
the flow and the ABAB rhyming .. excellent ..

[Lunette Lariz]

Thanks, Hamza! :)

[khalid]

so funny, so nice, so cute poem. i have really enjoyed reading it...smart boy but it depends on luck, maybe the fisherman can find only one....

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you! Haha, yes. :)

[Markus Anthony]

Nice rendition to as story i know very well.

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you! ^____________^

[amarlaksh]

wow its a great story. Except that "drifted" kind of forced the rhyme.Anyway a good write. keep writing

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you. :)

[WingsToFly]

sweet. :) nice imagination.

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank youuu! :)

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank youuu! :)

[WingsToFly]

you're welcome :)

[C.R.Turner]

Nice parable. Pity about the littering - or should I say, a-litteration! :/

Nice work! :)

[Lunette Lariz]

Thanks. :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

very gently penned poem .. makes you still want to believe that some good is left in this evil world!

[Lunette Lariz]

Oh, thank you. :)
Our world isn't that evil after all. :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

it was my pleasure .. this is world has so been filled with evil .. you only see a little good

[Sid]

Good poem, that need to care for the less well off is depicted well through your words here, you get that message across in a subtle, touching way...well done!!

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank yo! :D

[Tex]

A very nice piece about the inclination to care for others who may be less well off than us.

thank you bringing to to my attention.

Good job!

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you! :)