The Moth

Poem inspired by the Story of the Moth or known as 'Ang Kwento ng Gamugamo' in the Philippines

The fire is blazing and burning,
Blinding those little eyes he had.
The fire caught his gaze wandering,
And that turned him restless and mad.

He neither slept nor waited.
He never wasted any second.
He flew directly into the lamp lighted,
Into the fire that is once a legend.

However, something stopped him,
He remembered his Mother telling,
"Do not go near the fire no matter how lovely it may seem,
for it will turn you into dust falling."

Yet curiosity struck his mind,
He wanted to know what is there beyond the light.
But he suddenly felt something from his behind,
His wings are now flaming in the stillness of the night.

"Oh Mother Moth! I am so sorry!"
The child moth uttered before he turned into ashes.
No one helped him; no one heard about all his plea,
For the night was surrounded by tranquility.

Author's Note

Hope you like this. :)

Reviews

[Meallea Pomorette]

I know this story very well... It was always used by my grandmother to scare me back then... The way she used it clearly says "Mother knows best. You better follow or you'll end up in the middle pf nowhere."... Now let's not talk about it... It's giving me the creeps...
I must admit that curiosity gets us into trouble but sometimes it's our way of looking for the answers...

"The fire caught his gaze wandering,
And that turned him restless and mad."
This part reminds me of the mad scientists in the animes that I had watched...

"For the night was surrounded by tranquility."
The ending is much better that before..

I see no problem with the flow..
Job well done!!!

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank yowww! :D

[Meallea Pomorette]

No problem...

[Blue Ivory]

This is symbolic on so many levels! I haven't been able to use symbolism in a while, so I admire you for your talent :)

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you so much. :)

[Rene Velez]

I enjoyed it...

[Lunette Lariz]

Thanks. :)

[Markus Anthony]

At first, i thought! This is really familiar!!! I felt drifting back to the"HOME READING REPORT" eras of my life. I love this brand new rendition to the fable ive grown up into. Good job.

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you! ;)

[A love for poetry]

Very nice... Isn't this amazing; I have seen this happen many times, and until now do I realize there was a lesson in it to be realised.

Meaningful poem.

[Lunette Lariz]

I felt great that you realized something from it! Thank you for the review!! :D

[Wem Ortiz]

so pinoy :)

[Lunette Lariz]

Of course, Kababayan! :)

[Wem Ortiz]

haha mabuhay, :)

[Lunette Lariz]

:D

[Tai Ryens]

I don't think I have the right story embedded in my head through this poem, and it's giving me a headache. Nonetheless, I'm sure you've made a lovely poem influenced by the moth, and uncomprehendant as I am I'm sure I would call it lovely myself had I known the tale.

[Lunette Lariz]

Well, it is the story of a child moth who was fascinated by the fire that lights up a lamp. Her mother moth told him to stay away from it because it will cause danger, but because he didn't stick to what his mother told him, he flew directly into the fire and that caused him to be burned or turned into ashes.

[Tai Ryens]

Thought it sounded familiar. You've done a perfect representation of that.

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you. :)

[Sid]

Very well written and it flows very naturally...though I feel "disobedience" doesn't necessarily end in tragedy, it can end as something good at times, like David Scott said. It can be painful at times but we can always learn from our mistakes and grow...great write nevertheless!!

[Lunette Lariz]

Yes, thank you! I'll revise it to make it better. :DD

[Sid]

no need to revise it, it's pretty good the way it is. I was just pointing out the flip side of disobedience. :D

[Lunette Lariz]

Haha, well. I'm planning to revise it if I have time, but it seems that I haven't got much. xD :)

[Pax]

aha!!!
i know the inspiration very well...
a nice twist of the story kabayan...
keep it up...

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you, Kabayan! Maka-Rizal kasi ito. Haha. :D
Thanks again! =))

[Pax]

ok lang yun....his a great inspiration to many....
and your welcome!!

[Lunette Lariz]

Yes he is! He changed my vision about life. He's my idol. =)))
Mabuhay! :D

[EMMA]

it's really true... reading this made me remember something...

[Lunette Lariz]

Yeah, of course. =))))
By the way, thanks! :D