A Look Behind

My native land, so gentle and kind.

Every two years I travel,

Into my native land, I sail.

I long for its sight and smell,

I long to be in its sanctuary and be well.

My heart leaps with joy,

My lips form a smile,

I'm like a kid with a new toy,

When I step in my native land from a mile.

Though I hate the feeling of going away,

Of seeing the road fade as I look behind.
A tear always escapes my eye before I say,
"See you real soon, my land so gentle and kind."

Author's Note

I welcome criticisms. :)

Reviews

[Meallea Pomorette]

It's always a lesson to look back where you came from...
You might long for wealth and a better life but the place where you once lived in makes up who you are..

"See you real soon, my land so gentle and kind."
Sounds like a last farewell to me which reminds me of Mi Ultimo Adios...

Your poems are becoming shorter... It's not like I complain but I surely miss the longer ones which are story types...

[Lunette Lariz]

Okay, I will go and write longer ones as you wish.. but it'll take time for sure. Thanks! :)

[Meallea Pomorette]

I'll wait...

[Lunette Lariz]

;)

[Blue Ivory]

Nothing is more welcoming than home! This is sweet and refreshing.

[Lunette Lariz]

Thanks. ^_^

[A love for poetry]

Very nice; I was just thinking last night, how much I loved and missed the places I had journeyed to over the years; and every now and then I pick up a familiar scent of flora that I had encountered in those countries... So I think this is just great--the idea of this poem is great.

Perhaps a little more thought into the word choices could make it a little better. The first stanza is good, the other two need some re wording--great picture by the way, looks so surreal.

[Lunette Lariz]

Thanks!! :D

[Kelsey]

This was lovely, it really brought a sense of peace to the reader. I enjoyed it and the calm vibe it gives off. Nicely done. :)

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you! :)

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, it does indeed have this 'homey' feeling to it. Nothing false, all true. Well done.

[Lunette Lariz]

Thanks. :)

[Sid]

Nice poem, very heartfelt and real, we all miss our hometowns at times...this is great, well done!!

[Lunette Lariz]

Thank you very muuuch! :D

[EMMA]

I like it! Now, I suddenly missed my province and the people I left there.

[Lunette Lariz]

Aww. Thank youuuu! :)

[David Scott]

This poem is so "real" and has no pufffed up pretention. I like that about it. I think it has very real potential to be a great poem if you would take the time to give it some better structure. Just a little work on this and you would have something special. Good start. :-)
Keep writing from your heart. It is a gift you have!
Be well.

[Lunette Lariz]

A million thanks, Sir! :D I'll try to accomplish that if time permits.

[Hamza]

this one's real touching ...
the change in the emotion when coming home and then leaving it ...
the contrast is quite visible .. and the best part.. it is a real feeling ...
very well done !!

[Lunette Lariz]

Oh thank you very much, Hamza! :D

[Hamza]

:)