The Unfinished

So I am forced  to take off my masks, and you yours
our mouths shut? as if we'd been pierced by a glance!

The song of an old Banyan tree is not more full of judgment
It is more surprising how it tries to keep its balance;

so I pull the shadows around me like a puff
and crinkle my eyes as if at the most exquisite moment

of a very long opera, and then we are off!
without reproach and without hope that our delicate feet

will touch the earth again, let alone "very soon."
It is the law of my own voice I shall investigate.

I just start like birds in the sky, ever free to roam about

my thoughts have been restricted

somewhere in the mid-air as if a dead end

The only thing I can command is your whisper

your sweet lips touching mine

the hands clasped in a frenzied mode

to purge oneself from its inert abode

Reviews

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

I must admit your poetry speaks a volume. No doubt it reflects who you are and what you seek and that is surely truth.
Each stanza of yours has a depth beyond measure.
The third and forth line were beyond my scope of understanding but i shall take a pledge to find for myself what they mean.
Thanks for sharing, sir!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice, I like this here:
"I just start like birds in the sky, ever free to roam about
my thoughts have been restricted
somewhere in the mid-air as if a dead end"

[Just Me]

Very nice writing.

[Ripple of Aqua]

It took me from one image to the next; quick, deeply and to the point all the while twining your words into a magnificent silk. Well done!

[Priscilla Sayers]

Beautiful... I felt like it was started with maybe hopelessness or anger and then ended with strength and longing. Nicely done.

[Audrey Howitt]

So well written--and there are so many lines that are so wonderful--

so I pull the shadows around me like a puff
and crinkle my eyes

Really enjoyed this piece!

[Leslie Philibert]

This is a very good poem, a poem I read through more times and enjoyed it more each time, with a lot of hidden meanings.Loved the final couplet.Well done.

[Robert Haigh]

A wonderfully lyrical write, full of such creative imagery and ideas. Well done indeed!

[bookworm]

You are truly someone who has a deep appreciation for life and its hidden intricacies...there is so much that is being communicated here without being obvious. I feel your passion for the unspoken in your verses...beautiful...

[Ruth]

What is lovely about this piece is that it flows superbly! You have such an amount of imagery within this and have made it all fit perfectly together, so warming and beautifully written xoxo