Prologue

Prologue

                As I looked around, all I saw was strange buildings. People were talking on strange handheld mechanisms. Women were even wearing men’s clothing! Where was I? Whatever I had come through placed me here, in this foreign world... Jace was around here somewhere, I just knew it.  I would kill him for the sake of my family. The family he slaughtered mercilessly, without regret, without looking back. I would do the same to him, even if it took me sacrificing myself- My family was worth it.

                My mind went back to them as I remembered a time when I was happy, before everything I ever cared about was taken from me…

Reviews

[Brad]

now i'm hooked bring on the rest

[AreWeBothCrazy]

Intriguing! you make me want to read the rest, can't wait for the whole thing to come out. nice hook :)

[Short.Nerd]

Nice start. It leaves me wanting more to read.

[Dark Empress]

I like it. Leaves me wanting to read more

[Norma M Sutton]

Well it leaves me wondering what has happened and what IS happening. Nice start.

[Dingo the Archwizard of..]

Interesting idea, with a few minor grammar problems, nothing big. The only thing I suggest-- lengthen this. I know large bodies of text is intimidating on this site, but definitely lengthen it.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

hurm....a story based on revenge...?

[MoonlightIce]

Very nice(:

[Steve]

Ok...good. Talking on stange hand held mechanisms? lol

I like it. I am glad its brief. It doesnt hem you in. It leaves room for you to really take off with the story......

Go for it!