Thread of life

Life twists and turns

As the thread of life

Spirals out of control

The fates are funny that way;

 

Immortality never lasts

Even with liquid red

Coursing through our veins

The fates are funny that way;

 

Scissors snipping away

Severing the thread

That binds us to this life

The fates are funny that way;

 

Heroes are gone and past

Lives are dead and wasted

Pools of liquid red fill the holes

The fates are funny that way;

 

Buildings fall and crumble

Bridges break and tremble

Lives are crushed

The fates are funny that way;

 

People pray for salvation

Nobody is home however

They pray to the wrong Gods don’t you see?

The fates are funny that way;

 

Life twists and turns

As the thread of life

Spirals out of control

The fates are funny that way

 

Author's Note

Any and all criticism is welcome. Also, in the 6th stanza i'm not saying any one religion is wrong, thought i would say that so people wouldnt get offended.

Reviews

[Michael of Gilead]

Interesting, but since you made god plural i don't think you needed the disclaimer ;)

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loved the idea..well excuted..the repetition is good because the line is soo powerful..the picture is awesome..well done

[Erin]

Your epistophe was incredibly helpful to the tone and message of the entire poem. You made a philisophical poem seem...not blunt. Philosophy is usually blunt and harsh, yet you seemed to make it laid back, which is a great thing. I just think that you shouldn't have put a semi colon on the final stanza because it indicates that there's more, but there isn't. I think you should remove the last semi colon, but that's my thought.
Nice job. It was really good.
PBP

[Coyote Poetry]

There are a series of books on the fates. The power they hold is amazing. A very good poem.
"Immortality never lasts"
"They pray to the wrong Gods don’t you see?"
So many strong lines in this poem. I like poetry with history and logic. You have them both in this poem. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Short.Nerd]

Interesting poem. I like it (:

[David W Moore III]

The tapestry woven of exsanguinated husks and powdered bricks, with bleached bone needles. The tapestry of the fates is a large and incomprehensible cloth. Each section might be a comedy or a drama or a tragedy, but woven side by harmonious side with another. Our eyes can't fathom the entire picture. Nor can our scissors affect tge weave.

[Robyn]

fate is a funny thing, isnt it

[Cassiopia Summers]

Very interesting, I did however enjoy it. Wonderful poem.

[Norma M Sutton]

Interesting poem. Woven into the threads of life and blood coursing through our veins.

[Tallulah]

I absolutely love this. I love the whole Greek mythology aspect of the poem but it can also go way beyond that and even if you aren't well versed in Greek mthology and don't know who the fates are I love how u can still get something out of this. Great job.