My Curse

My heart cant help

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The mists swirl around my feet

                Creating an unearthly atmosphere

                                The swing creeks to and fro

As I sit on the swing

                My Feathers touch the ground

                                As I move back and forth

The air is thick and cold

                My dress is in shreds

                                From where I fell

My hair softly touching the feathers

                Feathers as soft as a rose

                                The color of a lily

My skin is fair

                My eyes are aqua

                                My hair is black

Everything around me is dead

                This is my curse

                                My punishment

My life here is never ending

                This is what I fell too

                                My heart can’t save me now

Help me someone

                Save me from this desolate place

                               Rescue me from this prison...

Rescue me from this place called Earth.

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

very interesting piece ... like the haunting feel to this write... overall great job on this ..a very deep write!!

[Randolf Ramos]

Truly great poem.

[nono]

Yeah nicely written I love how you did that...Yeah sometimes I think I'm cursed...With how much I trip over things...sometimes I wonder......Lolz this write is beautiful though nice job!

[Erin]

Nice style, but I think that your movement is blocked by something. it didn't really flow freely as much as it should. But it's a good poem, just I don't think that it's your best. Maybe it's because of the way you ended it -- it seemed like it was kind of an awkward place to end it. But the best thing about this poem is how emotional and somehow personal it is. It's great, just not really great like some of your other poetry.
PBP

[Fran Marie]

This has an eerie dreamlike quality about it~ hauntinly beautiful
indeed,well penned....

[Ian Faraway]

For me, I saw this as a wavy type of structure for a poem. It's different and I liked it. Again and as usual, keep up the good work. -Dakota

[Jonathan De Elvira]

you know? I kinda love the recent works of yours...
I feel like a fallen angel myself even more now...
sort of fascinated me...