My Curse

My heart cant help

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The mists swirl around my feet

                Creating an unearthly atmosphere

                                The swing creeks to and fro

As I sit on the swing

                My Feathers touch the ground

                                As I move back and forth

The air is thick and cold

                My dress is in shreds

                                From where I fell

My hair softly touching the feathers

                Feathers as soft as a rose

                                The color of a lily

My skin is fair

                My eyes are aqua

                                My hair is black

Everything around me is dead

                This is my curse

                                My punishment

My life here is never ending

                This is what I fell too

                                My heart can’t save me now

Help me someone

                Save me from this desolate place

                               Rescue me from this prison...

Rescue me from this place called Earth.

Reviews

[Shin]

Whoa, nice theme, the description was excellent, loved the title, great poem, a lot of emotion into writing it I imagine. Great job, keep it up.

[Marianne]

Ooh, that was good. The emotion was so deep. loved it. Nice Job.

[Poetic Beauty]

Earth can be a hard place to be especially if you have fallen from heaven. This is a great poem with many details in it which allow you to picture the character talking. This is a sad poem but done with beauty.

Pretty picture,
Pretty good flow,
Good work.

That's great! You did a good job. And that picture is very prety.

[Daydreamer54]

Wow what a poor angel. (well at least that's what i think the person is and I know I'm right) Anyway, it was beautiful poem which such sad emotion. u also created lovely imagery! great write! :)

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

I love pictures so much more after reading your work!

[Bard Constantine]

You capture the feel of imprisonment well, of being trapped in a place or situation one can't escape. Nicely written...

[Mistaken]

Magnificent! The picture really set the tone for this piece and you can really connect with it. Great!

[Short.Nerd]

Wow this may be one of my favorites you've written