Monday Blues

I was in such a funk at this time of my life, which was not that long ago...So glad i made it out

i have not the heart to struggle

Nor fight, eat or breathe

Sorrow and despair have taken me

I'm fighting to break free

To see a brighter day

But the clouds only darken

And cause my heart to slow

Is this what giving up is like

To feel defeated by life

To see it passing you by

With every minute that flows

Depression would be a joy

As I have not the heart to cry

Caring for nothing

Forgetting goals and dreams

Seeing only what you know

No longer hoping for anything

Save me someone, ANYONE

From this place where faith is not allowed

Too down to be lifted by my own strength

I have not the heart

To go on or give up

So I wait

Reviews

[Omar]

I've felt this way too many times in my life, and I decided that I would never feel that way again! I'm glad you made it as well :) There comes a time whn you just have to decide never to get yourself in that hole again. OK, we might get depressed and hopeless from time to time, but we have to avoid that ROCK BOTTOM.
I related strongly to these expressions:

"Depression would be a joy"

Sometimes we REALLY get addicted to depression and heartache, or any kind of pain. If you ever heard "I'm Only Happy When it Rains" for a band called Garbage, you'd see that we're not the only ones who've gotten addicted to pain. It's the worst addiction.



"Save me someone, ANYONE

From this place where faith is not allowed"

I so identified with this, because I've also felt hopeless and faithless once, in a place where "faith is not allowed," literally. You feel like God is just blocked out of your system, out of reach, distant. You try to pray, but you feel like no-one's listening.


Plus, Mondays always give me the blues. Hehe

Anyway, I see you understood that I relate strongly to this! A very simple but intrinsically complex piece. Good work.

O

[Charles D. Moorer]

Good morning heartache, here we go again. i know the feeling so well. You have captured the angst so well. Good job!

[C. C. Burl]

Oh, this is perfect! I just went through a low time, a depression, as some would call it, and you captured very well how it feels. This is lovely:

And cause my heart to slow
Is this what giving up is like

Slowing your heart . . . I didn't realize it, but when I'm depressed everything seems to slow and slur into pain and the thought of giving up. So I say, AMAZING WRITE. Flora.

[Lee E. Powell]

"I'm fighting to break free
To see a brighter day
But the clouds only darken"

This was awesome.

I don't know very much about poetry and would probably go into anaphylactic shock if I was ever forced to sit and actually write a poem. But I know that I liked this.

Thanks,
Lee

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I have felt this struggle many times before. Sounds like many of my days. hee hee.

good job at writing something that we can relate to.

kena

[Logan Carryall]

Perfect elaboration on this. I have been this poem for a very long period of time. Drowsy- where "faith is not allowed". I felt, in my own passage in this, a sense of epic war. One between Angels and Daemons. Angels give light. Daemon's blind. It is the fight between sight, or no sight.
Criticism:
I'm sure it's a typo but,
"As I have no the heart to cry"
no = not*
As I have not the heart to cry

Thats it. A very honest representation.
Thanks-

_Logan