Silence

Her scream is piercing

Spreading throughout the thick air

The scream is silence

Reviews

[Kat Haybaybay]

i know exactly what this means, and yes i understand

[Tom McRoberts]

Brief to an effect, clever! I'm not sure how well 'piercing' and 'spreading' work in describing one thing, they seem to create contradicting images. Perhaps consider unconventional ways of expressing the scream, I imagine your word choices were habitual. I hope I've not caused offence. As it stands it's already a really good poem, I just think you could push it to achieve greater effect. Keep it up!