Heartbeat

Another poem I wrote to try to help me out of my writer's block. Not my best. Fictional poem.

The rhythmic beating,
Thump, thump, thump.
My personal lullaby.
I listen to your heartbeat,
Always the same,
My never changing way to know you're with me.

Sometimes it doesn't feel like you're real,
That you'll slip from my fingers,
That I'll wake up from a pleasant dream.
But when you wrap me in your embrace,
And I hear your heartbeat,
I know this is reality,
And you're here with me.

Your heartbeat,
Steady and sure.
So unlike my own,
That flutters like wings on a bird.
Something about your heartbeat,
And your's alone,
Lulls me into a sense of security.
I could never imagine,
Laying my head on your chest,
And hearing nothing.

No matter what we've been through,
The hysterical fights,
The tearful goodbyes,
The distances,
We've been through it all,
And you swore,
As long as your heart beats,
You'll stay with me.

So I lay my head on your chest,
Just to check everyday,
To make sure your heartbeat will stay.
But you had to pick a fight,
With the one person that could hurt you.

Down you fell,
And I flew to your side,
Lay my head on your chest like I did everyday,
And instead of the drumming inside,
My strong sure reassurance.
There was nothing.

So I knew you left me.

Reviews

[Kelsy]

hmmmmm....... getting into writer's block sounds intresting *giggles*.Sad and Vivid.Nice job

[Kelsy]

hmmmmm....... getting into writer's block sounds intresting *giggles*.Sad and Vivid.Nice job

[Cathy Wattam]

A beautifully sad poem. What writer's block? If this is writer's block then I hope I suffer from it one day ;-)

[Lydia]

This was amazing! So deep, and sad!

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This was at first so sweet, and I can relate with a love not feeling real until you're in their arms and can hear their heartbeat, and then it turned so sad. But I'm glad it is fiction. Very good write. :)

[Captain]

This is such a beautiful, amazing poem. I read this and I want to cry. I can hardly believe that this is based on fiction. Excellent work. I'm extremely impressed.
'Captain

[Lily]

I love it It has so much emotion in this
So sad.

[Beth Lindsay]

This is really touching. I almost started crying at the end, thinking about someone I care very much about. A true, moving master piece

[Suditi]

Oh s**t.
The end was so sad. So heart breaking.

You've written the poem so wonderfully..that the reader can almost feel every emotion as the poem goes on..
A great write.

[Mike]

This is amazing brilliant concept always the sad ending but whoever this is about they are mssing something :)