Scream

ok i get pissed off alot lol but most of these are about the same person :D and i wrote them a while ago im not as agrresive at the moment lol xxxx

When i see your face
i want to rip it off
when you walk past
i wish you had a
chocking cough
this is not an exaggeration
i hope you die
i've never felt so much hate
but there it is
when i look at you with him
why did you do it he was ment to be mine
every time you breath i wish it was the last time
i wanna scream
 

Author's Note

just any suggestions if they are needed :D

Reviews

[Kizitaly]

It's ok. You need to capitalize your I's. Do you use spell check?

[Drifter]

There are a few typos such as "breath" should be "breathe" and "ment" should be "meant". This is definately a pissed off poem and I think more could be done with it. That's not saying it's bad; just that there feels like more can be said. Other than that, not too shabby. Good work.