Lunar Lullaby: A Half Sestina

The moon felt safe inside her shell

She tried to drench the burning

As droplets formed like drops of dew fell softly on her lips

She wept for things unchangeable, blanket of night wrapped around her shoulders

How lonely keeping watch while everyone’s asleep

Her gasps are gusts and teardrops now are whirring past her feet

 

From down below she’ll never know the burning

Still has ceased, across her children’s faces to their charred and splitting lips

Some earthlings still awake, lonely as she, watch little streams around their feet

Or listen quietly from the windows of their resting places, families fast asleep

While the ocean sound sucks itself inside its abandoned shells

The sea beats on the shores sore sunken shoulders

 

The moon peers down with reverence and touches her pale lips

Remembering the oceans kiss that every morning pulls her down to sleep

They never touch besides the tears that fall, burning

From her dearest’s eyes and land on her shoulders

Shoulders of the untouchable sea, boundless without shell

Or cage or country side to keep her contained, or chains upon her feet

Reviews

[Bear]

Have you ever had someone read you poetry out loud to you? If not I suggest you do, it is a great writing tool. If you don't have someone who can read it to you there are text to speech programs that work great, I myself use Natural reader, here is the link if your interested http://www.naturalreaders.com/index.html It is clear that you have a vivid imagination and are good with words as well a talent for creativity so I hope you will forgive me for not reviewing your poem. I am not a fan of abstract poetry, to me it seems worded to awkwardly to make sense. Example: (As droplets formed like drops of dew fell softly on her lips) I would have said "As droplets of dew formed they fell softly on her lips". It was interesting reading your work and I wish you good luck, good writing and good poetry :~)